Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use the past tense consistently: say “didn’t have” and “had,” not “don’t have” and “am having.” Your answer is also unclear because “we need to travel to my school from there that only” does not explain the situation naturally. Answer the question directly first, then add one specific reason or detail. Avoid repeating the same idea and use a linking word such as “because.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family had only one bicycle, so I couldn’t use it regularly. We mainly used it for short trips, while I usually walked or took public transport to school.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Avoid repetition, unfinished phrases, and unclear expressions like “it’s a go” and “sportious bip.” Use accurate vocabulary, for example, “different types of motorcycles,” “sports bikes,” and “young men.” Support your opinion with one or two specific reasons, such as convenience, affordability, or interest in particular models.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. Many people choose motorcycles because they are affordable and convenient in heavy traffic. Sports bikes are also popular, and some riders enjoy models such as the Himalayan because they are suitable for both city roads and longer journeys.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The question refers to a past period, so the past-tense form did not have is required. Do not use don't have when describing possession during childhood.

× I'm just having one bicycle and we need to travel to my school from there that only.

✓ I only had one bicycle, and we had to travel to school from there.

Because the answer describes the student's childhood, the verbs should be in the past tense: had and had to travel. The word only should be placed before the phrase it limits.

× I'm just having one bicycle and we need to travel to my school from there that only.

✓ I only had one bicycle, and we had to travel to school from there.

The original sentence has an unclear structure, especially the ending from there that only. Use two connected clauses with a clear subject and verb. A useful pattern is I had..., and we had to....

× Bikes up bikes are more popular in my country because they're using it from different kind of models and different kind of sports type bikes.

✓ Bikes are more popular in my country because people use them in different models and for different types of sports.

The phrase Bikes up bikes is not a correct sentence structure. Begin with the clear subject Bikes. Also, connect the reason with a complete clause containing the subject people and the verb use.

× Bikes are more popular in my country because they're using it from different kind of models and different kind of sports type bikes.

✓ Bikes are more popular in my country because people use them in different models and for different types of sports.

Bikes is plural, so the correct object pronoun is them, not it. Use them when referring to more than one bike.

× Bikes are more popular in my country because they're using it from different kind of models and different kind of sports type bikes.

✓ Bikes are more popular in my country because people use them in different models and for different types of sports.

After different, use plural nouns when referring to multiple categories: different types. The phrase different kind should also be changed to different kinds if it is retained.

× Bikes are more popular in my country because they're using it from different kind of models and different kind of sports type bikes.

✓ Bikes are more popular in my country because people use them in different models and for different types of sports.

They're using it does not correctly express the intended meaning. If people are the ones using the bikes, use the active structure people use them. If the intended meaning is that bikes are used, the passive form would be bikes are used.

× Some boys are liking the most sportious bip like Himalayan or Damaga or Alexander like that.

✓ Some boys like sporty bikes, such as the Himalayan, the Damaga, or the Alexander.

Sportious and bip are not appropriate English forms in this context. Use sporty bikes. Also, use such as to introduce examples clearly. For general habits, like is more natural than are liking.

× Some boys are liking the most sportious bip like Himalayan or Damaga or Alexander like that.

✓ Some boys like sporty bikes, such as the Himalayan, the Damaga, or the Alexander.

The sentence describes a general preference, so use the simple present tense like rather than the present continuous form are liking.

× They are mostly like the because of the some.

✓ They mostly like them because of their sporty designs.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains unclear word order. Use the subject they, the adverb mostly, the verb like, and the object pronoun them. Their sporty designs gives a clear reason for the preference.