Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and clarify the difference between a bicycle and a motorcycle, because “bike” can refer to either one. The phrase “nearby places” is slightly vague, and calling the motorcycle a “companion” sounds unnatural in this context. Use a more natural expression such as “I really enjoyed riding it” and add one specific detail about where or when you rode it.

例: Yes, I had a small bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood and to a nearby park after school. I really enjoyed it because it gave me a sense of freedom and independence.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Correct “riding their bikes and streets” to “riding their bikes in the streets” or, more naturally, “riding their bikes around their neighborhoods.” Avoid repetition in “my place in my country,” reduce fillers such as “uh” and “so yeah,” and use a linking word such as “because” to connect your explanation.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. Many people ride them in their neighborhoods or to nearby parks because they are convenient and inexpensive. In some cities, cycling is also becoming more common as people look for healthier and more environmentally friendly ways to travel.

× Many children, uh, love riding their bikes and streets, and they go to nearby parks or any other places using them.

✓ Many children, uh, love riding their bikes on the streets, and they go to nearby parks or other places using them.

The preposition on is required before streets because we say ride a bike on the street. The original phrase riding their bikes and streets incorrectly joins the verb riding with streets without a suitable preposition. Also, other places is more natural than any other places in this general statement.