Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You repeated the examiner's question instead of answering it. Respond directly with a clear yes/no answer, then add one or two specific details, such as who gave you the bike, where you rode it, or how often you used it. Keep your answer to two or three natural sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me a small red one, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends after school.

提案: You gave a relevant opinion, but several grammar and word-choice problems reduce clarity. Say “I’m not sure about mainland China” rather than “the mainland side,” “I’m from Hong Kong” rather than “I’m a Hong Kong people,” “not many citizens,” and “bikes” or “bicycles” instead of “price.” Also, avoid repetition and hesitation, and use a clearer structure: answer the question directly, give a reason, and add a specific example or comparison. For example, explain that bikes are less popular for commuting in Hong Kong because public transport is more convenient and the roads are crowded.

例: Bikes are not especially popular for daily commuting in Hong Kong. Although some people cycle for exercise, most residents prefer the MTR and buses because they are faster and more convenient, especially in such a crowded city. Cycling can also be difficult because there are relatively few bike lanes.

× I'm not sure about the mainland side because I'm a Hong Kong people.

✓ I'm not sure about the mainland side because I'm a Hong Kong person.

People is a plural noun, but the sentence refers to one person. Use the singular noun person after the singular article a. You can also say I'm from Hong Kong for a more natural expression.

× For this city, there's not much of the citizen would choose to use price as a daily vehicle.

✓ For this city, there aren't many citizens who would choose to use bikes as their daily means of transportation.

The noun citizens is plural, so the there-be structure must use there are or there aren't, not there's. Use there aren't many citizens to refer to a small number of people.

× There's not much of the citizen would choose to use price as a daily vehicle.

✓ There aren't many citizens who would choose to use bikes as their daily means of transportation.

Much is used with uncountable nouns, but citizens is a countable plural noun. Use many with citizens. Also, do not use the before the general plural noun citizens in this sentence.

× There's not much of the citizen would choose to use price as a daily vehicle.

✓ There aren't many citizens who would choose to use bikes as their daily means of transportation.

The original sentence incorrectly places would choose directly after the noun phrase without a relative pronoun. Use who to introduce the relative clause: citizens who would choose. This creates a complete and grammatically clear sentence.

× I'm not sure about the mainland side because I'm a Hong Kong people. So, uh, for this city, there's not much of the citizen would choose to use price as a daily vehicle because it it kind of like a waste of time and it's not that convenient at all.

✓ I'm not sure about the mainland side because I'm a Hong Kong person. For this city, there aren't many citizens who would choose to use bikes as their daily means of transportation because it is kind of a waste of time and not very convenient.

The sentence contains several number-related problems: a Hong Kong people should be a Hong Kong person, much should be many before the countable noun citizens, and citizen should be plural because it refers to multiple people. The repeated it is also removed, and bikes is used to match the topic of the question.