Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in one complete opening sentence. Avoid the fragment “When I was a child” and the repetition of “bike” and “bicycle.” You can improve naturalness by saying “a purple bicycle with training wheels” and then adding one specific detail about learning to ride or using the bike. The answer is relevant and sufficiently developed, but it would sound smoother with clearer sentence structure.

例: Yes, I did. When I was about five, my parents bought me a purple bicycle with training wheels, and I learned to ride it in our neighborhood. I was very excited because it was one of my first ways of getting around independently.

提案: Give a more concise topic sentence and avoid repeating the same idea in “That’s why I think bikes are popular.” Reduce hesitation fillers such as “uh” and use more natural phrasing, such as “people who cannot afford a car” or “people who want an inexpensive way to travel.” Also, support your answer with a wider range of reasons, such as convenience in crowded cities, low running costs, or environmental benefits. Be careful that bikes are popular not only because some people cannot afford other vehicles.

例: Yes, bicycles and motorbikes are very popular in India. Many people use them because they are affordable and convenient, especially in crowded cities where traffic can be heavy. In addition, they are cheaper to maintain than cars and produce less pollution.

× When I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

When I was a child is a dependent clause beginning with when, so it cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. It needs to be connected to an independent clause, or it can be rewritten as a complete sentence. A natural correction is I had a bike when I was a child.