Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question in a complete sentence and organize the details clearly. Use the past tense consistently because you are talking about childhood: say “bought” instead of “board burn,” “enjoyed” instead of “I’m really enjoying,” and “rode” instead of “I’m paddling.” Add one specific detail about where or why you rode the bicycle. Avoid sentence fragments such as “When I was seven years old” and connect your ideas with linking words such as “because” or “so.”

例: Yes, I did. My grandmother bought me a bicycle when I was seven years old, and I really enjoyed riding it. I often rode it around my neighborhood after school, so I became quite confident.

提案: Start directly with your opinion and avoid fillers such as “Cheers” and “Uh.” Use natural expressions like “in Sri Lanka” and “go to work by bicycle,” rather than “in our country Sri Lanka” and “go to the work by riding bicycle.” Explain why bicycles are popular with a complete reason, and support it with a specific example. Keep the answer focused and avoid unfinished phrases such as “even though” and “A child.”

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in Sri Lanka, especially in smaller towns and villages. Many people ride them to work or school because they are inexpensive and convenient. Children also use bicycles to travel around their neighborhoods and visit their friends.

× When I was seven years old.

✓ When I was seven years old, my grandmother bought a bicycle for me.

This is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. Connect it to the main clause with a comma.

× My grandmother.

✓ My grandmother bought a bicycle for me.

The original sentence is only a noun phrase and has no verb. Add a verb to express what your grandmother did.

× Board burn bicycle for me, I'm really enjoying.

✓ My grandmother bought a bicycle for me, and I really enjoyed it.

The question asks about your childhood, so the past tense is needed. Use bought instead of the incorrect verb form and enjoyed instead of am enjoying.

× Board burn bicycle for me, I'm really enjoying.

✓ My grandmother bought a bicycle for me, and I really enjoyed it.

Bicycle is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article a when it is mentioned for the first time.

× When I'm paddling my bicycle.

✓ I really enjoyed riding my bicycle when I was a child.

The original sentence begins with when but does not contain a complete main clause. Combine the idea with a complete sentence.

× When I'm paddling my bicycle.

✓ When I was riding my bicycle.

Because you are describing a childhood experience, use the past form was riding rather than the present form am paddling.

× Most of the people go to the work by riding bicycle

✓ Most people go to work by bicycle.

Use most people rather than most of the people when speaking generally. Work does not usually take the article the in the expression go to work, and bicycle needs the article a when used with riding a bicycle; alternatively, use by bicycle.

× People can easily doing their works

✓ People can easily do their work.

A modal verb such as can must be followed by the base form of the verb, so use do, not doing. Work is normally uncountable when referring to tasks in general.

× It is easy to be people can easily doing their works and even though.

✓ It is convenient because people can easily travel to work by bicycle.

The original clause contains two incomplete and incorrectly connected structures. Use because to introduce the reason and make the sentence contain one clear subject-verb structure.

× A child.

✓ Children can also ride bicycles easily.

A child is only a noun phrase and does not form a complete sentence. Add a subject and a verb to express a complete idea.