Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 質問に直接答えられており、バイクの色や練習の習慣など具体的な情報も含まれています。ただし、「every day」の繰り返しが冗長で、「it was so good times for me」は不自然です。「It was a really good time for me」または「I have fond memories of that time」のように言い換えましょう。また、最後の部分は接続詞を使って文を分けると、より明確で自然になります。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was small and grey, and I practised riding it every day. My parents often helped me, so I have very fond memories of that time.

提案: 自分の意見と理由を述べている点はよいですが、「our lot of people」は「a lot of people」、「I watch words people」は意味が不明確で、「I often see people riding bikes on the streets」のように修正する必要があります。また、「So that's why I think so」は前の内容と重複しているため削除しましょう。自転車を利用する人が多いことや、通勤・通学で使われていることなど、具体的な例を1つ加えると内容がより効果的になります。

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. A lot of people own one, and I often see people riding them on the streets, especially during their daily commute. They are convenient and inexpensive, so many people choose to use them.

× I practised every day and my parents helped me ride a bike every day it was so good times for me.

✓ I practised every day, and my parents helped me ride a bike. It was such a good time for me.

The singular subject pronoun 'it' cannot be used with the plural noun 'times' in this sentence. Use the singular noun 'time' because you are describing one experience. Also, 'such a good time' is the natural expression.

× I practised every day and my parents helped me ride a bike every day it was so good times for me.

✓ I practised every day, and my parents helped me ride a bike. It was such a good time for me.

The singular countable noun 'time' needs the article 'a' in the expression 'a good time.' The structure 'such a good time' is also grammatically correct and natural.

× I practised every day and my parents helped me ride a bike every day it was so good times for me.

✓ I practised every day, and my parents helped me ride a bike. It was such a good time for me.

The original sentence joins several independent clauses without proper punctuation, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into two sentences or connect them with an appropriate conjunction. Avoid repeating 'every day' unless the repetition is necessary.

× I suppose that bikes are popular in my country because our lot of people have a bike.

✓ I suppose that bikes are popular in my country because a lot of people have bikes.

The correct quantifier phrase is 'a lot of people,' not 'our lot of people.' Because 'people' is plural and the statement refers to bicycles in general, 'bikes' is more appropriate than 'a bike.'

× I suppose that bikes are popular in my country because our lot of people have a bike and I watch words people who ride a bike on the street.

✓ I suppose that bikes are popular in my country because a lot of people have bikes, and I watch many people riding bikes on the street.

The plural noun 'people' generally refers to more than one person, so the plural noun 'bikes' is more suitable when discussing bicycles in general. Using plural forms consistently makes the general meaning clearer.

× I suppose that bikes are popular in my country because our lot of people have a bike and I watch words people who ride a bike on the street.

✓ I suppose that bikes are popular in my country because a lot of people have bikes, and I watch many people riding bikes on the street.

After 'watch + object,' the present participle form can describe an action in progress: 'watch people riding.' This structure clearly shows that you observe people while they are riding their bikes.