Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and relevant, and you added a personal detail about your current bike. However, “Now I’m an adult” is unnecessary because adulthood is already understood, and “which I really enjoy using” would sound more natural as “which I really enjoy riding.” You could also explain briefly why you enjoy riding it to make your answer more developed.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, my husband bought me one for my birthday last year, and I really enjoy riding it because it helps me relax and get some exercise.

提案: Your main idea is clear, but the answer contains repetition (“in my country” appears twice) and several grammar and word-choice problems. Use “on special occasions” instead of “in occasions,” “parents give bikes as gifts” instead of “gave the surprises,” and avoid the unclear phrase “for a gift purpose.” Organize the response with a topic sentence followed by a specific example or reason.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. Parents often give them to their children as birthday or holiday presents. Many adults also ride bikes for exercise or to travel short distances because they are inexpensive and environmentally friendly.

× Yes, in my country bikes are popular in my country and the usually in occasions the parents gave the surprises to the children, adults and their relatives as a gift purpose.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country. Usually, on special occasions, parents give bikes as gifts to children, adults, and their relatives.

The sentence repeats in my country and combines several incomplete or incorrectly ordered phrases. Separate the ideas into two sentences and organize the information in a clear subject–verb–object structure.

× Yes, in my country bikes are popular in my country and the usually in occasions the parents gave the surprises to the children, adults and their relatives as a gift purpose.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country. Usually, on special occasions, parents give bikes as gifts to children, adults, and their relatives.

The adverb usually must not be preceded by the article the. In this sentence, Usually, is correctly placed at the beginning of the second sentence. Place frequency adverbs before the main verb or at the beginning of a sentence.

× Yes, in my country bikes are popular in my country and the usually in occasions the parents gave the surprises to the children, adults and their relatives as a gift purpose.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country. Usually, on special occasions, parents give bikes as gifts to children, adults, and their relatives.

Use on with occasions, not in. Also, as gifts is the natural expression for describing something given as a present. Learn common preposition combinations such as on special occasions and as a gift.

× Yes, in my country bikes are popular in my country and the usually in occasions the parents gave the surprises to the children, adults and their relatives as a gift purpose.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country. Usually, on special occasions, parents give bikes as gifts to children, adults, and their relatives.

The question asks about a general situation in your country, so use the present simple give, not the past form gave. Use the present simple for habits, routines, and generally true situations.

× Yes, in my country bikes are popular in my country and the usually in occasions the parents gave the surprises to the children, adults and their relatives as a gift purpose.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country. Usually, on special occasions, parents give bikes as gifts to children, adults, and their relatives.

The plural noun parents refers to parents in general, so it does not need the definite article the. Similarly, gifts is used generally rather than the surprises. Do not use the before a plural noun when referring to people or things in general.