Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly using the past tense: “No, I didn’t.” Avoid repeating the same idea several times and do not leave the final sentence unfinished. Use natural expressions such as “learn to ride a bike,” rather than “learned a bike.” You can explain your fear with one specific detail, then mention your father’s lack of time as a second reason. Use linking words such as “because,” “also,” and “however” to make the answer coherent. Keep the response to three or four complete sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I was afraid of falling and hurting myself, so I never learned to ride one. Also, my father was usually busy and didn’t have time to teach me. My sister learned by herself, but I still don’t feel confident on a bike.

提案: Give a clear answer first, then provide two well-developed reasons. Avoid repeating “easy” and use more natural phrases such as “affordable,” “convenient,” and “a practical way to get around.” The phrase “easy to travel” should be replaced with “easy to use for short journeys,” and “reach destination end time” should be “reach our destination on time.” Complete the final thought and use a specific example, such as commuting to work or school. A logical structure with “because,” “especially,” and “as a result” will improve coherence.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in crowded cities. They are affordable and convenient for short journeys, and they help people avoid heavy traffic. For example, many students and office workers cycle to school or work because they can reach their destinations on time. As a result, cycling is a practical and inexpensive way to commute.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a completed period in the past, so the past-tense form didn't have is required instead of don't have.

× Actually, I was very afraid to ride a bike because of what if I fall, what if I face injuries?

✓ Actually, I was very afraid to ride a bike because I was worried that I might fall or get injured.

The original sentence incorrectly uses two what-if questions after because of. Use a complete clause after because, such as I was worried that I might fall or get injured.

× What if I bleed I'm very afraid of injuries still now.

✓ I was afraid that I might bleed, and I am still afraid of injuries now.

The answer is mainly about the speaker's childhood, so was afraid and might bleed are appropriate for the past situation. The phrase still now is unnatural; still ... now is the correct form for a continuing feeling.

× So I've never learned a bike

✓ So I have never learned to ride a bike.

The verb learn is followed by to plus the base verb when describing a skill. Say learn to ride a bike, not learn a bike.

× but I've never learned a bike when I was a kid

✓ But I never learned to ride a bike when I was a kid.

When I was a kid identifies a finished time in the past, so the simple past never learned is more appropriate than the present perfect have never learned.

× I have reasons to explain they are easy, they are cheap, they are easy to travel

✓ I have several reasons: they are easy to ride, inexpensive, and convenient for traveling.

The adjective easy needs a suitable complement. A bike is easy to ride, not easy to travel. Inexpensive is also a more natural adjective than cheap in this context.

× I have reasons to explain they are easy, they are cheap, they are easy to travel, we have heavy traffic in our areas.

✓ I have several reasons for this. Bikes are easy to ride and inexpensive, and they are convenient because there is heavy traffic in many areas.

The original sentence joins several independent ideas with commas. Divide the ideas into complete sentences and connect them with suitable conjunctions.

× we have heavy traffic in our areas.

✓ There is heavy traffic in many areas.

Use there is to introduce the existence of uncountable traffic. The phrase we have heavy traffic is possible in some contexts, but there is heavy traffic is clearer and more natural here.

× so, it is easy to commute we can reach destination end time

✓ Therefore, it is easy to commute, and we can reach our destinations on time.

The phrase on time is the correct prepositional expression. The original phrase end time is incorrect. The sentence also needs the conjunction and to connect the two complete clauses.