Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use the correct past-tense forms. Say “I had one” rather than “I had it,” and avoid repeating the same idea. Use “bought me” without “to me,” and use “my friend and I always rode it” because you are describing a past habit. Add one specific detail about where you rode it or how you felt about the bike.

例: Yes, I had one when I was a child. My parents bought me a pink bike, and my friend and I often rode it around our neighborhood. I really enjoyed cycling because it was a fun way to spend time outdoors.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons. The phrases “in their city,” “doesn't seems,” and “the riding route doesn't care” are unclear or grammatically incorrect. You could say that bikes are not very popular in your city because there are few cyclists and not enough well-maintained bike lanes. Use linking words such as “because” and “as a result” to make the explanation more coherent.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country, at least not in my city, Jeonju. There aren’t many people who cycle regularly, partly because there are not enough safe and well-maintained bike lanes. As a result, most people prefer to use cars or public transportation.

× My parents bought me a pink bike to me, so my friend and I always riding, always ride up this bike.

✓ My parents bought me a pink bike, so my friend and I always rode this bike.

The verb buy already has the indirect object me in the structure bought me a bike, so to me is unnecessary. Also, ride up this bike is not the correct expression when you mean using a bike; say ride this bike.

× My parents bought me a pink bike to me, so my friend and I always riding, always ride up this bike.

✓ My parents bought me a pink bike, so my friend and I always rode this bike.

Always riding cannot function as the main verb by itself in this sentence. A continuous form needs an auxiliary verb, such as were always riding. However, because the question refers to your childhood, the simple past form always rode is more appropriate.

× My parents bought me a pink bike to me, so my friend and I always riding, always ride up this bike.

✓ My parents bought me a pink bike, so my friend and I always rode this bike.

The answer describes a past period in your childhood, so ride should be changed to its simple past form rode. Keep the tense consistent with had and bought.

× Well I don't think so because I live in Jeonju in their city doesn't seems any bike like the popular bike or other riding people.

✓ Well, I don't think so because I live in Jeonju, and there doesn't seem to be much of a bike culture or many people riding bikes in the city.

Their is a possessive determiner that refers to specific people, but no such people have been mentioned. The city is the appropriate noun phrase here because you are referring to Jeonju.

× Well I don't think so because I live in Jeonju in their city doesn't seems any bike like the popular bike or other riding people.

✓ Well, I don't think so because I live in Jeonju, and there doesn't seem to be much of a bike culture or many people riding bikes in the city.

After the auxiliary does not, the main verb must be in its base form. Therefore, doesn't seems is incorrect; use doesn't seem. In addition, the sentence is more naturally expressed with the there be structure.

× Well I don't think so because I live in Jeonju in their city doesn't seems any bike like the popular bike or other riding people.

✓ Well, I don't think so because I live in Jeonju, and there doesn't seem to be much of a bike culture or many people riding bikes in the city.

To say that something exists or does not exist, use a there be structure. The original sentence is missing this structure. There doesn't seem to be is followed by the things being discussed, such as much of a bike culture or many people riding bikes.