Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly using the past tense: “Yes, I had a bike.” Avoid mixing “will have” with “when I was a child.” The second part is unclear because of inaccurate word choice and sentence structure, so explain who bought the bike and why in a simple, well-organized sentence. Use a linking word such as “because” or “and” to connect the details. Keep the answer to two or three clear sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandmother bought it for me as a birthday present, and I was very excited because I had always wanted one.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then support it with one or two specific reasons. Place “for example” before the example rather than leaving it as a separate sentence. Use accurate vocabulary and avoid unclear expressions such as “dogly shed bikes” and “shot sheeps”; you could say “dockless shared bikes” and “short trips.” Also, use the plural form in “around cities” or specify a city. Connect the ideas smoothly with “because” or “as a result.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. For example, bike-sharing apps and dockless shared bikes have made cycling a convenient and affordable way to travel short distances. As a result, many people use them to commute or run errands.

× Yeah, I will have a bike when I was a child and it was brought by my grim mother's she Sandmaid is wife as a birthday present.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and my grandmother bought it for me as a birthday present.

Because the question asks about a past period, use the simple past had instead of the future form will have. The original sentence also has an unclear and incomplete structure. Use a clear subject and verb, such as my grandmother bought it. Remember to use the simple past when describing past experiences.

× Yes, I think so. Bikes are very popular for example. Bike sharing apps and dogly shed bikes have made cycling a convenient and affordable choice for shot sheeps around city.

✓ Yes, I think so. Bikes are very popular. For example, bike-sharing apps and dockless shared bikes have made cycling a convenient and affordable choice for short trips around the city.

For example should introduce a complete example sentence and should be placed at the beginning of that sentence. The phrase around city needs the definite article the because it refers to a particular city or the city in general. Use around the city rather than around city. Also, use clear and recognizable vocabulary, such as dockless shared bikes and short trips, to make the meaning understandable.