Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời chưa trực tiếp và có nhiều lỗi khiến ý nghĩa không rõ, chẳng hạn “A cold”, “eat it bowl” và “right by”. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời rõ ràng như “Yes, I did.” Sau đó, hãy nói ai tặng xe, khi nào bạn nhận được và bạn thường đạp xe với ai. Dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán vì câu hỏi nói về thời thơ ấu; đồng thời dùng liên từ như “because”, “and” hoặc “so” để nối ý. Tránh các từ ngập ngừng như “uh” và kiểm tra cách phát âm của “bike”, “ride” và “bicycle”.

例: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bike for my birthday when I was about eight years old. I really liked it, and I often rode it with my friends at the weekend.

提案: Bạn đã đưa ra ý chính rằng xe đạp phổ biến, nhưng câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi từ vựng, ngữ pháp và phát âm, ví dụ “the old and the young everyone”, “ride by a quail” và “improve” chưa hoàn chỉnh. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp bằng “Yes, they are very popular.” Sau đó, giải thích cụ thể rằng cả người trẻ và người lớn tuổi đều sử dụng xe đạp, đồng thời nêu lợi ích rõ ràng như cải thiện sức khỏe, tiết kiệm tiền hoặc giảm ô nhiễm. Dùng cấu trúc “because” để giải thích nguyên nhân và tránh lặp lại “ride bike”.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. People of all ages ride them because cycling is good for their health and helps them save money on transportation. In addition, bikes are useful for short journeys and do not cause air pollution.

× A cold when I was young.

✓ I had a bike when I was young.

The original sentence has no main verb. A complete sentence needs a subject and a verb. Use I had to answer a question about something you possessed in the past.

× I have one uh, eat it bowl by my father on my birthday.

✓ I had one; it was bought by my father for my birthday.

The question asks about the past, so have should be changed to had. The passive structure was bought is also needed to show that your father bought the bike. Use for my birthday, not by my birthday, because for expresses purpose or occasion.

× I have one uh, eat it bowl by my father on my birthday.

✓ I had one; it was bought by my father for my birthday.

The phrase eat it bowl by is not grammatically meaningful. To describe an object that someone purchased, use the passive form it was bought by my father.

× I will like it.

✓ I liked it.

Will refers to the future, but you are describing your childhood experience. Use the simple past liked.

× I'm usually uh, right by with my friend in the weekend.

✓ I usually ride a bike with my friends on weekends.

Use ride a bike to describe the activity. Use with to show who joins you and on weekends for a recurring time expression. The phrase in the weekend is not the usual expression in standard English.

× I'm usually uh, right by with my friend in the weekend.

✓ I usually ride bikes with my friends on weekends.

Because you are describing a general activity with more than one friend and possibly more than one occasion, use the plural forms bikes, friends, and weekends.

× I'm usually uh, right by with my friend in the weekend.

✓ I usually ride bikes with my friends on weekends.

For a regular habit, use the simple present ride rather than the present progressive am riding. The word usually commonly describes repeated habits.

× Uh, just the by really popular in my country, uh, the old and the young everyone, uh, ride by a quail because the ride by, uh, can help, uh, improve.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country. People both young and old ride bikes because riding bikes can help improve their health.

The original sentence has unclear word order and incomplete verb phrases. Use the plural subject bikes with are. After because, use the gerund riding as the subject of the second clause. The phrase help improve is correct because help can be followed by the base form of a verb.

× Uh, just the by really popular in my country, uh, the old and the young everyone, uh, ride by a quail because the ride by, uh, can help, uh, improve.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country. People both young and old ride bikes because riding bikes can help improve their health.

Old and young should describe people, so use the clearer phrase people both young and old. Also, really should be placed before the adjective popular.

× Uh, just the by really popular in my country, uh, the old and the young everyone, uh, ride by a quail because the ride by, uh, can help, uh, improve.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country. People both young and old ride bikes because riding bikes can help improve their health.

When an activity functions as the subject of a clause, use the gerund form riding. Therefore, riding bikes is the correct subject after because.

× Uh, just the by really popular in my country, uh, the old and the young everyone, uh, ride by a quail because the ride by, uh, can help, uh, improve.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country. People both young and old ride bikes because riding bikes can help improve their health.

The article the is not needed before the general plural noun bikes. Use bikes when talking about bicycles in general.