Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính phù hợp nhưng bị ngập ngừng và tự sửa nhiều lần, khiến nội dung khó hiểu. Em cần dùng thì quá khứ vì câu hỏi hỏi về thời thơ ấu: “I had”, “my parents gave”, “I used to ride”. Ngoài ra, “pink bag” không phù hợp với ngữ cảnh xe đạp, có lẽ em muốn nói “pink bike”. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp trong câu đầu, sau đó thêm lý do và hoạt động cụ thể; tránh các cụm sai như “used it going for to ride”, “around neighborhood my friends” và “practice know how to”.

例: Yes, I had a small pink bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my birthday, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends. It was a great way to have fun and learn how to ride confidently.

提案: Em đã trả lời trực tiếp và đưa ra lý do, nhưng cần sửa lỗi số nhiều và cách kết hợp từ: “bikes are popular”, “use bikes”, “commute to work/school”. Cụm “students in higher or secondary school” nên đổi thành “high-school students” hoặc “secondary-school students”; “use provide in commute” và “As a result is no reducing” không rõ nghĩa. Em nên dùng một ví dụ cụ thể và kết luận rõ ràng, chẳng hạn “Therefore, the number of cyclists remains high.” Hãy tránh lặp lại “commute” quá nhiều và dùng từ nối tự nhiên như “For example” và “Therefore”.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work or school. For example, many secondary-school students ride bikes every day because they are affordable and convenient. Therefore, cycling remains a common form of transportation, especially in smaller cities.

× Yes I have my I have a small pink bag.

✓ Yes, I had a small pink bag.

The question asks about the past, so the answer should use the past tense had instead of the present tense have. The repeated words are treated as a speaking disfluency rather than a grammar error.

× When I was a child my parents gave it to me for my birthday and I used it going for to ride and around neighborhood my friends.

✓ When I was a child, my parents gave it to me for my birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends.

The expression used it going for to ride is grammatically incorrect. To describe a past habit, use used to + base verb: used to ride. Do not add -ing after used to.

× When I was a child my parents gave it to me for my birthday and I used it going for to ride and around neighborhood my friends.

✓ When I was a child, my parents gave it to me for my birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends.

The correct preposition for riding in the surrounding area is around, and the correct preposition before people who accompany you is with. The phrase for to ride is unnecessary and incorrect.

× When I was a child my parents gave it to me for my birthday and I used it going for to ride and around neighborhood my friends.

✓ When I was a child, my parents gave it to me for my birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends.

Neighborhood is a singular countable noun in this sentence and needs the definite article the because it refers to the specific neighborhood where the speaker lived.

× When I was a child my parents gave it to me for my birthday and I used it going for to ride and around neighborhood my friends.

✓ When I was a child, my parents gave it to me for my birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends.

The original sentence contains several incorrectly connected verb and prepositional phrases. Use the clear structure used to ride + object + place + with someone.

× Additionally I can use it to practice know how to.

✓ Additionally, I could use it to practice riding.

Because the speaker is describing a childhood experience, the past form of can, could, is more appropriate. Modal verbs are followed by the base form of a verb.

× Additionally I can use it to practice know how to.

✓ Additionally, I could use it to practice riding.

The verb practice is normally followed by a gerund when describing an activity: practice riding. The form practice know is incorrect in this context.

× Yes, I think it's very popular in my country because many people use bike to commute their work or commute to their school.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use bikes to commute to work or to school.

The answer is discussing bikes in general, so use the plural noun bikes. The plural subject also requires the plural verb are.

× Yes, I think it's very popular in my country because many people use bike to commute their work or commute to their school.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use bikes to commute to work or to school.

The verb commute is followed by to when referring to a destination. Say commute to work or commute to school, not commute their work.

× Yes, I think it's very popular in my country because many people use bike to commute their work or commute to their school.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use bikes to commute to work or to school.

When speaking about bikes in general, the plural form bikes is more natural than the singular countable noun bike without an article. Work and school can be used without an article when referring to their usual purposes.

× For example, students in higher or secondary school use provide in commute their school for everyday.

✓ For example, students in high school or secondary school use bikes to commute to school every day.

The destination requires the preposition to: commute to school. The phrase in commute is incorrect.

× For example, students in higher or secondary school use provide in commute their school for everyday.

✓ For example, students in high school or secondary school use bikes to commute to school every day.

Every day is an adverbial time expression meaning each day. Everyday is an adjective used before a noun, as in everyday activities.

× For example, students in higher or secondary school use provide in commute their school for everyday.

✓ For example, students in high school or secondary school use bikes to commute to school every day.

The original sentence has an incorrect verb sequence: use provide in commute. Use the structure use + noun + to + base verb: use bikes to commute.

× As a result is no reducing.

✓ As a result, bike use is not decreasing.

After the verb be, a continuous action requires a present participle ending in -ing. Decreasing is the correct form, not reducing in this sentence. The negative form is is not decreasing.

× As a result is no reducing.

✓ As a result, bike use is not decreasing.

The original sentence has no clear subject after As a result. Add the subject bike use and form the sentence as subject + be + not + present participle.