Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly in the first sentence, then explain how you used the bike. Use the past tense consistently: “loved” instead of “love.” Avoid repeating “by bike” and improve the final phrase by saying “when I went to college” or “during my college years.” You could also add one specific detail, such as how often you rode it or where you went.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I really enjoyed riding it. I used to cycle to school every day and continued using it during my college years. It was a convenient and enjoyable way to get around.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and organize the reasons with linking words such as “firstly” and “also.” Correct the subject–verb agreement error: “bikes help,” not “it help.” Replace the unclear phrase “other than cars” with “unlike cars” or “compared with cars,” and avoid fillers such as “uh.” Add a specific explanation about traffic or a concrete example of where people commonly ride bikes.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in crowded cities. Firstly, they make it easier to travel through heavy traffic, and they are also much easier to park than cars. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips to work, shops, or nearby metro stations.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because I love to travel by bike and I used to go to school by bike and college as well.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because I loved traveling by bike, and I used to go to school and college by bike as well.

The question refers to a past period, when I was a child, so the verb love should also be in the past tense: loved. The phrase go to school and college by bike is more natural and avoids repeating by bike unnecessarily.

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country because it help in uh, travelling easily, uh, because of traffic and it is easy to park anywhere in the city other than cars.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because they help people travel easily despite the traffic, and they are easy to park anywhere in the city.

Bikes is plural, so it should be referred to with the pronoun they, not it. The verb help is correct with the plural subject they. If the subject were a singular noun, such as a bike, the verb would need the third-person singular form helps.

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country because it help in uh, travelling easily, uh, because of traffic and it is easy to park anywhere in the city other than cars.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because they help people travel easily despite the traffic, and they are easier to park than cars.

The expression other than cars does not make a clear comparison between bikes and cars. Use the comparative form easier and than to compare the two types of vehicles: bikes are easier to park than cars.