Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời đi đúng trọng tâm và có nêu lý do, nhưng còn nhiều lỗi về thì, cấu trúc câu và sự lặp ý. “I cannot keep balance” nên đổi thành “I couldn’t keep my balance” vì đang nói về quá khứ; “maneuver it perfectly” hơi không tự nhiên trong ngữ cảnh này, nên dùng “ride it properly”. Tránh lặp lại “I had a bike” và “I cannot ride it”, đồng thời kết thúc bằng một ý hoàn chỉnh thay vì “So yeah”.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I couldn’t ride it properly at first because I couldn’t keep my balance. It took me several weeks of practice before I could ride it confidently.

提案: Câu trả lời có quan điểm rõ ràng và cố gắng đưa ra lý do, nhưng cách diễn đạt còn thiếu tự nhiên và câu cuối chưa hoàn chỉnh. “more preferred” nên đổi thành “more popular” hoặc “preferred to”; “our population is high in the traffic” không đúng nghĩa, nên diễn đạt là “the roads are often crowded because of the high population”. Ngoài ra, “a reasonable” cần có danh từ đi sau, chẳng hạn “a reasonable means of transport”. Hãy dùng các từ nối như “because” và “therefore” để liên kết ý mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in crowded cities. Since the roads are often congested, many people use bicycles for short trips because they are affordable and convenient. However, motorbikes are still more common for longer journeys.

× because I cannot keep balance

✓ because I couldn't keep my balance

The sentence describes a situation in the past, so cannot must change to couldn't. The phrase keep my balance is the natural expression for staying steady while riding a bike.

× So even I have a bike, I had a bike, I cannot ride it.

✓ Even though I had a bike, I couldn't ride it.

The events happened when you were a child, so have and cannot should be changed to had and couldn't. The repeated phrase I have a bike, I had a bike should be removed for clarity.

× So even I have a bike, I had a bike, I cannot ride it.

✓ Even though I had a bike, I couldn't ride it.

Even cannot introduce the intended contrast by itself. Use even though to mean despite the fact that. It should be followed by a complete clause: even though I had a bike.

× bikes are more preferred than other means of transportation

✓ bikes are preferred to other means of transportation

Preferred already expresses comparison, so more preferred is unnecessarily redundant in this sentence. The standard construction is be preferred to something.

× our population is high in the traffic

✓ our population is large, and the traffic is heavy

In is not appropriate in the phrase high in the traffic. Population is described as large, while traffic is commonly described as heavy or chaotic.

× It's always, uh, in chaotic state.

✓ It's always in a chaotic state.

A singular countable noun phrase such as chaotic state requires an article. Use a before chaotic state because the sentence refers to one state.

× So bikes are, umm, a reasonable.

✓ So bikes are a reasonable means of transportation.

Reasonable is an adjective and cannot function as the noun after a reasonable. Add a noun, such as means or option, to complete the sentence structure.