Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваша відповідь прямо відповідає на запитання й містить особисту деталь про батька, але є помилки в граматиці та природності висловлювання. Використовуйте “I was six or seven years old” замість “I was six or seven”, “an interesting experience” замість “interesting experience”, а також “ride a bike” замість “drive a bike”. Оскільки ви розповідаєте про минулу подію, потрібно сказати “I fell down”, а не “I fall down”. Об’єднайте ідеї за допомогою зв’язки “because” і сформулюйте відповідь у 2–3 чітких реченнях.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about six or seven years old. It was an interesting experience because my dad taught me how to ride it, although I fell down a few times at first.

提案: Ви почали відповідати на запитання, але слово “bags” змінює зміст; потрібно сказати “bikes”. Завершіть речення та чітко поясніть, чому велосипеди популярні або непопулярні. Наприклад, згадайте щоденні поїздки, користь для здоров’я, доступність чи велосипедні доріжки. Використовуйте природну конструкцію “There are many ways for people to get around by bike” і додайте конкретний приклад, уникаючи незавершених фраз.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. Many people ride them every day because cycling is affordable, healthy, and convenient for short journeys. In some cities, there are also dedicated bike lanes.

× It was interesting experience because my dad taught me to drive a bike and I fall down.

✓ It was an interesting experience because my dad taught me to drive a bike and I fall down.

The singular countable noun experience needs an article. Use an before interesting because interesting begins with a vowel sound.

× It was interesting experience because my dad taught me to drive a bike and I fall down.

✓ It was interesting experience because my dad taught me to drive a bike and I fell down.

The question asks about a childhood experience in the past, so the past-tense form fell is required instead of the present-tense form fall.

× I think bags are popular in my country because I see people who ride a bike every day and also in my country there are a lot of ways where people can.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because I see people riding them every day. Also, there are many ways for people to ride bikes in my country.

The original sentence ends with an incomplete clause: people can has no complement. A complete structure is people can ride bikes. Splitting the long sentence into two sentences also makes the ideas clearer.