Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız soruya doğrudan yanıt veriyor ve bisikletin rengi ile dört tekerlekli olması gibi özgün ayrıntılar içeriyor. Ancak “when I was child” yerine “when I was a child” demelisiniz. “We had to take two of the tires” ifadesi doğal değil; “we took two of the training wheels off” daha uygun olur. Son cümlede bisikleti hâlâ kullanabildiğinizi söylemeniz iyi, fakat “I can still ride it” ifadesi daha doğal ve akıcıdır. Bağlantı için “At first” ve “After a few years” gibi ifadeler kullanabilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I did. I had a pink bike when I was a child, and it initially had four wheels. After a few years, we took the two training wheels off, so I learned to ride it properly. I still have it, and I can still ride it occasionally.

提案: Ana fikriniz anlaşılır ve Türkiye’de bisiklet kullanımının neden düşük olduğunu açıklıyorsunuz. Ancak “instead of like short kilometers” ifadesi anlaşılmaz ve burada kullanılmamalıdır; bunun yerine “even for short distances” diyebilirsiniz. “But because” ile başlayan cümle eksik bir yapıdır; “This is mainly because...” şeklinde tam bir cümle kurun. “The roads aren’t designed for bikes” yerine “There aren’t enough bike lanes, and the roads can be unsafe for cyclists” daha doğal ve spesifiktir. Cevabı bir sonuç cümlesiyle tamamlayarak bisikletlerin özellikle kısa mesafelerde daha popüler olabileceğini belirtebilirsiniz.

例: No, I wouldn’t say they are very popular in Turkey, although some people use them for short distances. This is mainly because many roads do not have dedicated bike lanes, which makes cycling quite dangerous. As a result, people often prefer to drive or use public transport, even for relatively short journeys.

× I had a bike when I was child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The singular countable noun child requires the indefinite article a in this expression. Use a before a singular countable noun when referring to someone as one member of a group or category.

× So after some years we had to take two of the tires.

✓ So after a few years, we had to take two of the tires off.

The phrasal verb take off means to remove something. The particle off is required when describing the removal of the tires. Also, a few years is the natural expression for a small number of years.

× No, I don't think bikes are popular in my country instead of like short kilometers.

✓ No, I don't think bikes are popular in my country, especially for short distances.

The original sentence has an incorrect and incomplete structure after country. Instead of like short kilometers does not correctly express the intended meaning. Use especially for short distances to explain when bikes are used.

× But because in Turkey, the roads aren't designed for bikes or motorcycles.

✓ This is because, in Turkey, the roads aren't designed for bikes or motorcycles.

The original sentence begins with because but does not contain an independent main clause, so it is a sentence fragment. Add This is to complete the sentence and connect the reason to the previous statement.