Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本回应了问题，但表达不够清晰，且有较多语法和用词错误。你想表达的应该是“邻居家的孩子学会骑车后，我借用了他的自行车”，可以直接说“ I didn’t have my own bike, but I often borrowed my neighbor’s.” 不要重复使用“bike”，并用“because”“so”连接原因和结果。注意：应说“teach me how to ride a bike”，而不是“learned me the bike”；“own a bike”，而不是“own a bike on”；“bikes”，而不是“spikes”。建议补充一个具体细节，例如你在哪里骑车或骑车的感受。

例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. However, I often borrowed my neighbor’s bike after he learned how to ride it. I usually rode it around my neighborhood, which was a lot of fun.

提案: 回答有明确观点，也提供了身边人的例子和骑行活动，内容比较丰富。但开头的“whether it is popular in all country”不自然，应改为“whether bikes are popular throughout the country”。避免使用“the people around me they”这种重复主语；“whenever they are available during weekends”表达不准确，可以说“whenever they have free time at weekends”。“take on some challenges with each other”和“do some sports, to just exercise”较啰嗦，可以改为“challenge each other to cycle around the island for exercise”。建议先直接回答“是的”，再用“for example”引出具体情况，并控制在三到四句话内。

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. For example, many people in my area go cycling at weekends when they have free time. Some of them even challenge each other to cycle around the whole island, both for exercise and for fun.

× I don't know whether it is popular in all country.

✓ I don't know whether they are popular in all countries.

“all”后面通常要接可数名词复数，因此“all country”应改为“all countries”。另外，前文提到的是复数名词“bikes”，所以代词应使用复数“they”，而不是“it”。

× The people around me they are just very obsessed with riding bicycles.

✓ The people around me are just very obsessed with riding bicycles.

“The people around me”已经是完整的主语，后面不能再重复使用“they”。英语中应删除多余的代词“they”。

× So I didn't own a bike on but I could just ride other spikes.

✓ So I didn't own a bike, but I could just ride other spikes.

“own a bike”本身已经表达“拥有一辆自行车”，不需要介词“on”。删除“on”后，句子结构才正确。

× Whenever they are available during weekends, they will just take on some challenges with each other, they would just circle around the whole island to do some sports.

✓ Whenever they are available during weekends, they will just take on some challenges with each other and circle around the whole island to do some sports.

同一个条件句中描述相同的将来或习惯性活动时，情态动词应保持一致。前面使用了“will”，后面不应突然改成“would”，所以应将“would”删除，并用“and”连接两个动作。

× Whenever they are available during weekends, they will just take on some challenges with each other, they would just circle around the whole island to do some sports.

✓ Whenever they are available during weekends, they will just take on some challenges with each other and circle around the whole island to do some sports.

原句用逗号直接连接两个完整的分句，形成逗号拼接错误。可以使用并列连词“and”连接两个动作，使句子结构完整、清晰。