Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng và có thêm thông tin về người mua xe cũng như hoạt động cuối tuần. Tuy nhiên, câu đầu có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và trật tự từ: “I have all my” không rõ nghĩa, “when I was child” cần sửa thành “when I was a child”, và vì đang nói về quá khứ nên dùng “had” và “bought” thay vì “have” và “brought”. Cụm “At weekend” nên là “At the weekend” hoặc “On weekends”, còn “enjoy the fresh air with” bị bỏ dở; có thể nói “enjoy the fresh air”. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể, chẳng hạn xe có màu gì hoặc bạn thường đạp xe ở đâu.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was about eight years old. On weekends, I usually rode it around my neighborhood with my friends and enjoyed the fresh air.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời trực tiếp và đưa ra lý do phù hợp, đồng thời có sự so sánh giữa xe đạp, ô tô và xe máy. Tuy nhiên, cần dùng danh từ số nhiều và cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn: “cars and motorbikes are more popular”, “motorbikes and cars are easier and faster to drive”. “Fastly” không được dùng phổ biến trong ngữ cảnh này; hãy dùng “quickly” hoặc “faster”. Bạn cũng nên giải thích cụ thể hơn, ví dụ khoảng cách xa, giao thông đông đúc hoặc thời tiết nóng, và bỏ từ ngập ngừng “umm” để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Cars and motorbikes are more common because they are faster and more convenient for travelling long distances. In addition, the hot weather and busy roads make cycling less attractive for many people.

× Yes, I have all my when I was child I and my father brought it for me.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child, and my father brought it for me.

Because the question asks about your childhood, you should use the past tense. Change have to had. The phrase had one is also the natural way to say that you possessed a bike in the past.

× Yes, I have all my when I was child I and my father brought it for me.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child, and my father brought it for me.

Child is a singular countable noun, so it needs the indefinite article a. The correct phrase is when I was a child.

× Yes, I have all my when I was child I and my father brought it for me.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child, and my father brought it for me.

The original sentence has an incomplete and disorganized structure, especially the phrase have all my and the repeated subject I. Use one to refer to a bike and connect the two complete clauses with and.

× At weekend I usually ride my bike around my town to enjoy the fresh air with.

✓ At weekends, I usually ride my bike around my town to enjoy the fresh air.

The natural expression is at weekends or on weekends, not at weekend. The preposition with is unnecessary because enjoy the fresh air is already a complete phrase.

× At weekend I usually ride my bike around my town to enjoy the fresh air with.

✓ At weekends, I usually ride my bike around my town to enjoy the fresh air.

The sentence ends with the unnecessary word with, which makes the structure incomplete. Remove it so that the sentence ends with a complete purpose phrase: to enjoy the fresh air.

× No, I think in my country car and motorbike are more popular than bikes.

✓ No, I think cars and motorbikes are more popular than bikes in my country.

When speaking generally about cars and motorbikes, use plural nouns: cars and motorbikes. Their plural forms also agree correctly with the plural verb are.

× This is because umm motorbike and car driver more easily and fastly.

✓ This is because motorbikes and cars are easier and faster to drive.

The sentence refers to types of vehicles in general, so motorbike and car should be plural: motorbikes and cars. Using plural nouns makes the general meaning clear.

× This is because umm motorbike and car driver more easily and fastly.

✓ This is because motorbikes and cars are easier and faster to drive.

Easier and faster are the correct comparative adjectives after are. Fastly is not normally used in this context, and easily does not fit the intended comparison. The phrase easier and faster to drive expresses the meaning naturally.

× This is because umm motorbike and car driver more easily and fastly.

✓ This is because motorbikes and cars are easier and faster to drive.

The original sentence does not contain a correct finite verb. Add are to form the verb phrase are easier and faster to drive.

× This is because umm motorbike and car driver more easily and fastly.

✓ This is because motorbikes and cars are easier and faster to drive.

The original word order is incorrect, and driver cannot function as the main verb in this sentence. The corrected structure uses the subject motorbikes and cars, the verb are, and the comparison easier and faster to drive.