Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, I did.” Correct the grammar in “enjoyed it ride a bike” to “enjoyed riding a bike,” and add the article in “a quite outgoing person.” The phrase “the most in favorite thing” is unnatural; say “one of my favorite activities.” Avoid fillers such as “uh” and explain your answer with one specific detail, such as where or when you rode your bike.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike when I was a child, and I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood. Since I was quite outgoing, I often rode it with my friends after school. It was one of my favorite activities because it gave me a sense of freedom.

提案: Give a direct answer first, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in Hong Kong.” Use accurate grammar: “one of the most popular activities,” “a beautiful river,” “enjoy riding,” and “reduce stress.” Avoid repeating words, such as “enjoy enjoy,” “it it,” and “in my country.” The expression “a country called Hong Kong” is inaccurate because Hong Kong is a city and special administrative region; say “in Hong Kong.” Organize the answer with a reason and a specific example, such as cycling along the waterfront or in a park.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Hong Kong, especially for exercise and leisure. Many people enjoy cycling along the waterfront or in parks because the scenery is beautiful. In addition, riding a bike is a relaxing way to reduce stress and stay fit. However, cycling is less common in busy urban areas because the roads can be crowded.

× When I was younger I enjoyed it ride a bike because I was quite outgoing person.

✓ When I was younger, I enjoyed riding a bike because I was quite an outgoing person.

The verb enjoy must be followed by a gerund, or verb + -ing form, so ride should be riding. The pronoun it is unnecessary before riding a bike.

× When I was younger I enjoyed it ride a bike because I was quite outgoing person.

✓ When I was younger, I enjoyed riding a bike because I was quite an outgoing person.

The singular countable noun person requires an article. Use an before outgoing because outgoing begins with a vowel sound.

× So uh, riding a bike was the most in favorite thing in my younger life.

✓ So, riding a bike was my favorite thing when I was younger.

The phrase the most in favorite thing is not grammatically correct. Use my favorite thing to express the preferred activity. The phrase when I was younger is also more natural than in my younger life.

× Of course, I think riding a bike is one of the popular sports in my country, because there are beautiful river in my country called Hong Kong, so many people usually enjoy enjoy to riding a bike in Hong Kong.

✓ Of course, I think riding a bike is one of the popular sports in my country because there is a beautiful river in Hong Kong, so many people usually enjoy riding a bike there.

The singular noun river requires the singular form of there be: there is a beautiful river. The plural form there are must be followed by a plural noun, such as beautiful rivers.

× Of course, I think riding a bike is one of the popular sports in my country, because there are beautiful river in my country called Hong Kong, so many people usually enjoy enjoy to riding a bike in Hong Kong.

✓ Of course, I think riding a bike is one of the popular sports in my country because there is a beautiful river in Hong Kong, so many people usually enjoy riding a bike there.

Use there is with one singular noun, a beautiful river. There are is used only with plural nouns.

× Of course, I think riding a bike is one of the popular sports in my country, because there are beautiful river in my country called Hong Kong, so many people usually enjoy enjoy to riding a bike in Hong Kong.

✓ Of course, I think riding a bike is one of the popular sports in my country because there is a beautiful river in Hong Kong, so many people usually enjoy riding a bike there.

The verb enjoy must be followed by a gerund, so enjoy to riding is incorrect. Use enjoy riding. The repeated word enjoy should also be removed.

× It it is a great way to stress reduce stress.

✓ It is a great way to reduce stress.

The subject pronoun it is repeated unnecessarily. Use it only once at the beginning of the sentence.

× It it is a great way to stress reduce stress.

✓ It is a great way to reduce stress.

The phrase to stress reduce stress has an incorrect word order and contains an unnecessary word. After a great way, use the infinitive phrase to reduce stress.