Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız soruya doğrudan yanıt veriyor; ancak “however” öncesinde noktalama kullanılmalı ve “learn how can I drive” yapısı yanlış. Bisiklet için “ride a bike” ifadesini kullanın; doğru yapı “learn how to ride a bike” şeklindedir. Ayrıca cevabı daha doğal hâle getirmek için bisikleti neden kullanamadığınızı veya bu durumla ilgili bir duygunuzu ekleyebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I never learned how to ride it properly because I was afraid of falling. I was a little disappointed because my friends often rode their bikes together.

提案: Ana fikriniz anlaşılır ve sağlık yararına değinmeniz olumlu; ancak “really easy” ifadesi tekrarlanıyor ve cümle yapısı oldukça uzun ve bağlantısız. “Especially because they are convenient and environmentally friendly” gibi daha doğal bir yapı kullanın. “When you won't go somewhere” yerine “when people need to travel short distances” ifadesini tercih edin. Cevabınızı neden, sonuç veya örnek belirten bağlaçlarla daha düzenli geliştirin.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. They are convenient for travelling short distances, and they also help people stay fit. In addition, cycling is an environmentally friendly way to get around because it reduces traffic and pollution.

× When I was a child I had a bike however I couldn't learn how can I drive

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike, but I couldn't learn how to ride it.

However is not used correctly to join these two independent clauses in this sentence. Use but to show contrast. A comma should normally come before but when it connects two complete clauses.

× When I was a child I had a bike however I couldn't learn how can I drive

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike, but I couldn't learn how to ride it.

After learn, use an indirect question with how to, not how can I. The form how can I ride is used in a direct question, whereas how to ride is correct inside this sentence.

× In my opinion, bikes are really popular in my country, especially that's really easy for everyone and beneficial when you won't go somewhere, that's really easy and that must be beneficial for our health

✓ In my opinion, bikes are really popular in my country because they are easy for everyone to use and beneficial when you want to go somewhere. They are also beneficial to our health.

The original sentence contains several incorrectly connected clauses and repeated ideas, which makes the structure difficult to follow. Divide the ideas into two complete sentences and connect the reason with because.

× In my opinion, bikes are really popular in my country, especially that's really easy for everyone and beneficial when you won't go somewhere, that's really easy and that must be beneficial for our health

✓ In my opinion, bikes are really popular in my country because they are easy for everyone to use and beneficial when you want to go somewhere. They are also beneficial to our health.

Bikes is plural, so use the pronoun they, not the singular pronoun that. Use they when referring back to plural nouns.

× In my opinion, bikes are really popular in my country, especially that's really easy for everyone and beneficial when you won't go somewhere, that's really easy and that must be beneficial for our health

✓ In my opinion, bikes are really popular in my country because they are easy for everyone to use and beneficial when you want to go somewhere. They are also beneficial to our health.

The subject bikes is plural, so it must be followed by the plural verb are. The original form that's is singular and does not agree with bikes.

× In my opinion, bikes are really popular in my country, especially that's really easy for everyone and beneficial when you won't go somewhere, that's really easy and that must be beneficial for our health

✓ In my opinion, bikes are really popular in my country because they are easy for everyone to use and beneficial when you want to go somewhere. They are also beneficial to our health.

Won't means will not, but the intended meaning is want to. Use the present-tense form want in when you want to go somewhere. Do not use will in this type of time clause when referring to a general situation.