Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense: say “Yes, I did.” Avoid repeating “I had a bike,” and use correct prepositions and expressions, such as “on my sixth birthday” and “my father gave it to me.” Combine ideas with a linking word such as “because” or “and.” Add one specific detail about how you used the bike, while keeping the answer to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My father gave me a beautiful red bike on my sixth birthday, and I was absolutely delighted with it. I used to ride it around my neighborhood with my friends after school.

提案: Give a clear opinion at the beginning, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Avoid incomplete phrases like “Open word” and “supportive for people like.” Use the present tense and plural forms correctly: “bikes,” “many people,” and “go to school.” Support your opinion with a logical reason and a specific example, such as reducing traffic or helping children travel to school.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. Many students ride them to school because it is convenient and inexpensive. In addition, cycling helps reduce traffic and pollution in busy cities.

× Yes, in my childhood I have.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child.

The question refers to a past period, so the past tense is needed. Use did or had instead of the present-tense form have. A complete answer would be: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child.

× I had a bike, it was very beautiful and the color was red and my father gifted me in my 6th birthday.

✓ I had a very beautiful red bike. My father gave it to me on my sixth birthday.

The original sentence joins several complete ideas with commas and and, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into two sentences. Also, gave it to me is the more natural verb structure when describing a present.

× I had a bike, it was very beautiful and the color was red and my father gifted me in my 6th birthday.

✓ I had a very beautiful red bike. My father gave it to me on my sixth birthday.

Use on with a specific day or date, including a birthday: on my sixth birthday. Do not use in in this expression.

× Is in my country nearby was very popular

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

The original word order is incorrect and the sentence is difficult to understand. Begin with the subject, bikes, followed by the verb are. Because the question asks about the present situation, use the present tense.

× nowadays many people and children use bike for going to school

✓ Nowadays, many people and children use bikes to go to school.

When speaking generally about bicycles, use the plural noun bikes. The phrase to go to school is also the natural structure for expressing purpose after use.

× And it was very supportive for people like.

✓ Bikes are very useful for people.

The original sentence is incomplete because like does not have a clear ending or meaning. In addition, supportive is not the natural adjective for describing how bikes help people. Use useful instead and state the subject clearly.