Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本直接，但有几处不自然的表达。应说“didn’t have one”而不是“didn’t have”，说“learned to ride a bike”而不是“learned a bike”。“pathetic”在这里语气不合适，可以改为“a little disappointing”。此外，句子中重复使用“which”，使表达较啰嗦。建议采用“直接回答+具体经历+感受”的结构，并控制在2—3句话内。

例: No, I didn’t have a bike of my own when I was a child. I learned to ride one by borrowing my neighbors’ bikes, so it was a little disappointing that I couldn’t have one myself. Having my own bike was actually a childhood dream.

提案: 回答中有一定观点和原因，但逻辑不够连贯：先说共享单车很流行，随后又说自行车不流行，应该明确区分“共享单车的使用”和“人们把骑车作为日常爱好”。“a lot of share”“ServiceNow like countrywide”和“many people they love like cycling”表达不准确或不完整。建议使用“However”“because”“compared with”等连接词，并加入具体场景，例如通勤、短途出行或与阿姆斯特丹比较。

例: Yes, shared bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. People often use them for short journeys because they are convenient and inexpensive. However, cycling as a regular hobby is probably less popular than in Amsterdam, where many people ride bikes every day.

× To be honest, no, I didn't have.

✓ To be honest, no, I didn't have one.

动词“have”在这里需要一个宾语。由于问题中提到的是“a bike”，回答中可以用代词“one”代替“a bike”，不能直接说“I didn't have”。建议回答“Did you have...?”时使用完整结构，例如“Yes, I did”或“No, I didn't have one”。

× I just learned a bike from my neighbors, which was pathetic because I didn't actually own a bike, which was my dream.

✓ I just learned to ride a bike from my neighbors, which was pathetic because I didn't actually own one, even though owning a bike was my dream.

“learn”后面不能直接接“a bike”。表达“学会骑自行车”应使用“learn to ride a bike”。另外，第二个“which”指代不清，改为“even though owning a bike was my dream”后，句子关系更清楚。

× I think shared bikes are popular in our country 'cause we have a lot of share, umm ServiceNow like countrywide.

✓ I think shared bikes are popular in our country because we have a lot of shared-bike services nationwide.

“a lot of”后面通常需要接可数名词复数或不可数名词。“share”在这里既不是合适的名词，也不能表达“共享单车服务”。应使用复数名词“shared-bike services”。建议记住：“a lot of + 可数名词复数/不可数名词”。

× But I don't think that bikes are very popular in our country because I don't see many people they love like cycling in our country.

✓ But I don't think that bikes are very popular in our country because I don't see many people who love cycling here.

“many people”后面不能直接再接主语代词“they”。如果要修饰“people”，应使用关系代词“who”，构成“people who love cycling”。另外，“love cycling”表示“喜欢骑自行车”，不需要再加“like”。

× Maybe there are a lot, but not there are a lot in Amsterdam.

✓ Maybe there are a lot of cyclists, but there aren't as many as in Amsterdam.

否定的“There be”结构应使用“There aren't”，不能说“not there are”。此外，“a lot”后补充“of cyclists”可以使意思更完整。表达数量比较时，可以使用“there aren't as many as...”。