Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one or two specific details. The response is clear and personal, but “It was gifted to me” is less natural than “I was given it” or “I received it,” and “It was a custom for me” is incorrect in this context. Say “It was specially made for me” if you mean it was customized. Also, avoid repetition such as “I loved it so much” and “I was so happy”; connect your ideas more naturally with linking words such as “because” or “as a result.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I received it as a present on my sixth birthday, and it was specially made for me. It was pink with yellow stripes, so I absolutely loved it and rode it almost every day.

提案: The answer gives a clear opinion and a relevant reason, but improve the grammar and naturalness of “when there is snow or a rain.” Say “when it snows or rains” or “during snowy or rainy weather.” Avoid using both “because” and “so” in the same cause-and-effect sentence; use one clear structure. You could also make the answer more balanced by mentioning that cycling may still be popular in warmer seasons or in some cities.

例: I wouldn’t say that bikes are very popular in Russia because the weather is often cold and unpredictable. Cycling can be uncomfortable when it snows or rains, especially in winter. However, bikes are more common in warmer months and in cities with dedicated cycling lanes.

× It was a custom for me, it was colored in pink and had yellow stripes.

✓ It was custom-made for me, colored pink, and had yellow stripes.

When describing the color of something, use colored + adjective, not colored in + adjective. The phrase custom-made is used to describe something specially made for a person. The original sentence also contains a word-choice issue: custom means a usual tradition or practice, whereas customized or custom-made expresses the intended meaning.

× To be honest, I don't think that bikes are popular in Russia because we often have bad weather, so it's not really comfortable to ride a bike when there is snow or a rain.

✓ To be honest, I don't think that bikes are popular in Russia because we often have bad weather, so it's not really comfortable to ride a bike when there is snow or rain.

Rain is normally an uncountable noun when referring to weather, so it does not take the indefinite article a. Use snow or rain when speaking about weather conditions in general. Use a rain only in special contexts, such as a rain that lasted for several hours.