Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接提到了父亲送你自行车，但“awarded me a bike”用词不自然，应改为“gave me a bike”或“bought me a bike”。“gave me some expectation”表达不清，可以具体说明父亲教你骑车或希望你学会骑车；“I spend on nights”语法错误且意思不明确。建议使用过去时，并按照“直接回答—具体细节—感受”的结构组织，控制在2至3句。

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike for my birthday, and he taught me how to ride it. I spent many enjoyable evenings cycling around my neighborhood, so I have very fond memories of it.

提案: 回答观点明确，也提供了学生和上班族两个具体例子，结构基本清晰。不过“you are actually right”不适合没有先表达观点的问答；“popular in among”应改为“popular among”，“the younger generations”可简化为“young people”，“go to their companies”应改为“go to work”。此外，“may”重复使用且语气不自然，可以用一般现在时描述普遍现象，并用“also”或“while”增强衔接。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among young people. Many students cycle to school because it is cheap and convenient, while office workers often ride bikes to work to avoid traffic jams. In recent years, shared bicycles have made cycling even more common.

× He gave me some expectation so that I can ride my bike smoothly and I spend on nights during my childhood and it is so wonderful time.

✓ He gave me some expectation so that I could ride my bike smoothly and I spent my nights during my childhood, and it was such a wonderful time.

前文使用了过去时态“gave”，因此表示过去能力或可能性的情态动词也应使用过去形式“could”，而不是现在形式“can”。建议在叙述过去经历时保持整段时态一致。

× He gave me some expectation so that I can ride my bike smoothly and I spend on nights during my childhood and it is so wonderful time.

✓ He gave me some expectation so that I can ride my bike smoothly and I spent my nights during my childhood and it is so wonderful time.

“spend”描述的是童年时期发生的事情，应使用过去式“spent”。另外，“spend”后面应直接接表示时间的名词，例如“spend my nights”，不能说“spend on nights”。

× He gave me some expectation so that I can ride my bike smoothly and I spend on nights during my childhood and it is so wonderful time.

✓ He gave me some expectation so that I can ride my bike smoothly and I spend my nights during my childhood and it is so wonderful time.

“spend”表示“度过（一段时间）”时，后面直接接时间名词或短语，不需要介词“on”。因此应将“spend on nights”改为“spend my nights”。

× He gave me some expectation so that I can ride my bike smoothly and I spend on nights during my childhood and it is so wonderful time.

✓ He gave me some expectation so that I can ride my bike smoothly and I spend on nights during my childhood and it was so wonderful time.

“it”指的是童年时期的经历，属于过去时间，因此应使用过去式“was”，而不是现在式“is”。描述过去经历时，要注意整句话的时态保持一致。

× He gave me some expectation so that I can ride my bike smoothly and I spend on nights during my childhood and it is so wonderful time.

✓ He gave me some expectation so that I can ride my bike smoothly and I spend on nights during my childhood and it was such a wonderful time.

可数名词单数“time”前需要冠词。表达“如此美好的时光”时，应使用“such a wonderful time”，而不是“so wonderful time”。结构是“such + a/an + 形容词 + 单数可数名词”。

× Yes, you are actually right, because bikes are popular in among the younger generations in our country.

✓ Yes, you are actually right, because bikes are popular among the younger generations in our country.

“among”本身已经是介词，表示“在……之中”，前面不能再加介词“in”。因此“popular in among”应改为“popular among”。