Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and avoid hesitations and self-corrections such as “uh” and repeated words. Use consistent past tense: “had,” “went,” and “did.” Also, “their dad” is incorrect because you are talking about yourself; say “my dad.” Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one specific detail about when or why you rode your bike.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I have many fond memories of it. I often rode it after school, usually with my dad, because it was a fun way to exercise and spend time together.

提案: Give a clear answer and support it with accurate, specific information. The phrases “they average secondary or older age range” and “Students use bike used by to travel” are unclear and grammatically incorrect. Use “secondary-school students” and “use bikes to get around.” Add a linking word such as “For example” and explain why bikes are popular, such as their low cost or convenience.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among secondary-school students. For example, many students cycle to school because bikes are inexpensive and convenient. They are also useful for short trips, particularly in smaller towns where traffic is not too heavy.

× When I was a child, I, uh, had a bike and I, I have a lot of, uh, memories with it.

✓ When I was a child, I, uh, had a bike, and I, I had a lot of, uh, memories with it.

The sentence describes experiences during childhood, so the past tense had should be used consistently instead of the present-tense form have. When talking about a finished period in the past, keep the related verbs in the past tense.

× I usually went biking, uh, after school and, uh, do some, uh, did some exercise with their dad.

✓ I usually went biking, uh, after school and, uh, did some, uh, exercise with my dad.

Because the answer refers to a past childhood routine, did should be used instead of do. The phrase did some exercise is the correct past-tense expression. Also, my is needed when the speaker refers to their own father.

× I usually went biking, uh, after school and, uh, do some, uh, did some exercise with their dad.

✓ I usually went biking, uh, after school and, uh, did some, uh, exercise with my dad.

Their is a third-person possessive pronoun, but the student is talking about their own father. Use my before dad when referring to something belonging to or connected with the speaker.

× My classmates go to school with bikes and they average secondary or older age range.

✓ My classmates go to school by bike, and they are usually in secondary school or older.

The phrase they average secondary or older age range is not grammatically structured. The verb are is needed before the age or education description, and the phrase secondary school or older expresses the intended meaning more clearly. By bike is also the natural expression for traveling by bicycle.

× Students use bike used by to travel.

✓ Students use bikes to travel.

The general plural noun bikes is needed because students use more than one bike in general. The words used by are unnecessary and make the sentence ungrammatical. Use the simple structure use + plural noun + to + verb.