Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: This is a clear and well-developed answer with a direct response and a specific personal detail. The linking word “although” is used effectively. However, “a proper bike” could be replaced with “a real bike,” and “a small toy bike for young children” is slightly repetitive. You could also explain why you wanted a bike to make the answer more engaging.

例: No, I didn’t have a real bike when I was a child, although I really wanted one. My parents bought me a small toy bike, and I used to ride it around the yard for hours. I wanted a real bike because I hoped to explore the neighborhood with my friends.

提案: The answer responds directly and gives relevant reasons, such as affordability, convenience, and avoiding traffic. However, “becoming increasingly famous” should be “becoming increasingly popular,” “the electric bikes” should be “electric bikes,” and “traffics” should be “traffic.” Also, scooters are not always considered bicycles, so you could refer to them separately. Use a more natural phrase such as “for short commutes.”

例: Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly popular in my country, especially electric bikes. They are used by both men and women because they are affordable and convenient for short commutes. They also help people avoid traffic, which is a major problem in large cities.

× Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly famous in my country, especially the electric bikes and the scooters. They are now used by both men and women because they are cheap and convenient for the short commutes and help avoid traffics.

✓ Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly famous in my country, especially electric bikes and scooters. They are now used by both men and women because they are cheap and convenient for short commutes and help avoid traffic.

Traffic is an uncountable noun when it refers to the movement of vehicles on roads, so it should not take the plural ending -s. Use traffic, not traffics. Also, when referring to electric bikes and scooters in general, use the uncountable noun traffic without an article.

× Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly famous in my country, especially the electric bikes and the scooters. They are now used by both men and women because they are cheap and convenient for the short commutes and help avoid traffics.

✓ Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly famous in my country, especially electric bikes and scooters. They are now used by both men and women because they are cheap and convenient for short commutes and help avoid traffic.

The definite article the is generally omitted before plural countable nouns when discussing things in general. Therefore, say electric bikes and scooters, not the electric bikes and the scooters. Similarly, say for short commutes when referring to commutes generally, not for the short commutes.