Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly with “Yes, I did” instead of “As I did.” Then add a specific detail about when, where, or why you rode your bike. Use a complete sentence and appropriate punctuation. The answer is clear, but it could sound more natural and developed.

例: Yes, I did. I usually rode my bike to the beach near my house after school. It was a convenient and enjoyable way to spend time outdoors.

提案: Use “Compared with the Netherlands” or “Compared with Holland,” rather than “In comparison to the Holland.” Avoid repeating “Holland,” and do not begin the second sentence with “Because”; connect the reason to the main sentence. Also use the plural “bikes” and say “it is easy to ride a bike” or “cycling is easy” for natural grammar.

例: Compared with the Netherlands, bikes are not as popular in my country. This is probably because my country has more hills, whereas the Netherlands is very flat and has excellent cycling infrastructure. As a result, many more people use bikes for their daily journeys there.

× As I did, I usually rode a bike after school to the beach near my house.

✓ When I was a child, I usually rode a bike after school to the beach near my house.

As I did does not correctly introduce the time or situation in this sentence. Use when I was a child to connect the activity with the period mentioned in the question. You could also answer more directly: Yes, I did. I usually rode a bike after school.

× In comparison to the Holland where I used to live, Bike is not so popular as in Holland.

✓ Compared with Holland, where I used to live, bikes are not as popular here as they are in Holland.

Holland is a proper place name and normally does not take the definite article the. Do not say the Holland. Use Holland by itself.

× In comparison to the Holland where I used to live, Bike is not so popular as in Holland.

✓ Compared with Holland, where I used to live, bikes are not as popular here as they are in Holland.

When talking about bicycles in general, use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular Bike. Also, the verb must agree with the plural subject: bikes are, not Bike is.

× In comparison to the Holland where I used to live, Bike is not so popular as in Holland.

✓ Compared with Holland, where I used to live, bikes are not as popular here as they are in Holland.

The comparison is incomplete because as in Holland does not clearly state what is being compared. Use the complete structure not as + adjective + as: bikes are not as popular here as they are in Holland.

× Because Holland is a flat country and so easy to ride a bike.

✓ Holland is a flat country, so it is easy to ride a bike there.

The original sentence begins with Because, which creates a dependent clause, but it does not provide a main clause. In addition, the phrase so easy to ride a bike needs the subject it. Use it is easy to ride a bike there, or connect the idea with so as shown in the correction.