Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, direct, and well organized, with a topic sentence followed by specific details about when you received the bike and what it looked like. To sound more natural, replace “yellow ornaments” with “yellow decorations” or “yellow details,” as “ornaments” is less common when describing a bicycle. You could also add a brief comment about how often you used it or how you felt about it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mum gave it to me as a birthday present when I turned seven. It was red with yellow details, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon. I was really excited to have it because it gave me a sense of freedom.

提案: You answer the question directly and give a reason, but the explanation repeats “bike” and “cycle” and contains a grammar error: say “ride a bike” rather than “ride bike.” The phrase “because” is also repeated in the same sentence, so use a linking expression such as “This is mainly because” to improve fluency. Be more specific about the infrastructure, for example, by mentioning the lack of bike lanes, heavy traffic, or unsafe roads. Also, “yellow decorations” is more natural than “yellow ornaments” when describing a bicycle.

例: I don’t think bikes are particularly popular in my country, especially in large cities. This is mainly because there aren’t enough bike lanes, and the roads are often crowded with cars. As a result, many people only ride bicycles in public parks, where it is safer and more relaxing.

× I don't believe that bikes are popular in my country because it is pretty hard to ride bike and cycle in my city because of the infrastructure.

✓ I don't believe that bikes are popular in my country because it is pretty hard to ride a bike and cycle in my city because of the infrastructure.

The singular countable noun bike needs an article. Use a before bike when referring to one nonspecific bike: ride a bike. The sentence is otherwise grammatically acceptable.