Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is difficult to follow because it begins with “No,” but later says that you rode a bicycle as a child. Also, use the past tense consistently: say “I didn’t have” rather than “I don’t have had.” Clarify whether you mean a bicycle or a motorbike, since a driving licence is generally required for a motorbike, not an ordinary bicycle. Give a direct answer first, followed by one clear reason or detail, and avoid repeated fillers such as “uh” and “till.”

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood, especially during the summer holidays. I stopped riding it regularly when I turned 18 because I became more interested in driving a car.

提案: You answer the question directly, but there are several grammar and word-choice problems. Use “various kinds of bikes,” “which are used by many people,” and “bikes are budget-friendly.” Avoid repeating “in my country” and replace “it takes a very less road” with a natural idea such as “they take up less road space.” Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and linking words, then support your opinion with specific examples, such as commuting, exercise, or reducing transport costs.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who commute short distances. They are relatively affordable, fuel-efficient, and easy to use in crowded cities. In addition, cycling is a convenient way to exercise and it helps reduce traffic congestion.

× No, I don't have had a bike when I was child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about a past situation, so use the simple past tense, did not have, rather than the incorrect form don't have had. The phrase when I was a child also correctly places the situation in the past.

× No, I don't have had a bike when I was child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The singular countable noun child needs the indefinite article a. Use a before a singular noun when referring to one non-specific person or thing.

× Because it is not allowed without driving license and you'll get driving license after you're an adult.

✓ Because riding a bike without a driving licence was not allowed, and you could only get a driving licence after becoming an adult.

The student is describing rules that applied during childhood, so use the past tense was not allowed. The phrase could only get is also more suitable for describing a past condition than the future form you'll get.

× Because it is not allowed without driving license and you'll get driving license after you're an adult.

✓ Because riding a bike without a driving licence was not allowed, and you could only get a driving licence after becoming an adult.

Driving licence is a singular countable noun in this context, so it needs the article a each time it is first mentioned in the sentence.

× I was riding bicycle when I was child, till I get, I used, I turned 18.

✓ I rode a bicycle when I was a child until I turned 18.

The answer describes a completed period in the past, so use the simple past rode and turned. The expression until I turned 18 is the natural way to describe the end of that period.

× I was riding bicycle when I was child, till I get, I used, I turned 18.

✓ I rode a bicycle when I was a child until I turned 18.

The singular countable nouns bicycle and child require the indefinite article a. Say a bicycle and a child.

× In my country, there are various kind of bikes.

✓ In my country, there are various kinds of bikes.

Various refers to more than one kind, so the noun kind must be plural: kinds.

× There are various kind of bikes, which is used by many of people.

✓ There are various kinds of bikes, which are used by many people.

The relative pronoun which refers to plural bikes, so use the plural verb are, not is. The corrected sentence also uses the plural noun kinds after various.

× Which is used by many of people.

✓ Which are used by many people.

Before a plural noun used in a general sense, say many people, not many of people. Many of must be followed by a determiner, such as many of the people.

× It is also a budget friendly that any middle class family can buy.

✓ It is also a budget-friendly option that any middle-class family can afford.

Budget-friendly is an adjective, so it cannot be used alone after a. Add the singular noun option after the adjective. The article a is correct before the singular countable noun option.

× It takes a very less road to travel.

✓ It requires very little road space to travel.

Road space is an uncountable noun in this meaning, so use little, not less with a very. The phrase very little road space is the natural quantifier structure.

× It takes a very less road to travel.

✓ Bikes require very little road space when travelling.

The original structure takes a road is not natural for expressing the amount of space that bikes need. Use the clearer structure bikes require very little road space.