Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and maintain a clear structure: give a clear yes/no answer, add one or two specific details, and explain how you felt about learning to ride. Correct the vocabulary and grammar: say “bike,” not “bag”; use the past tense “had” and “learned”; say “I learned to ride it,” not “I learned it”; and use “despite the struggles,” not “despite of all the struggles.” Avoid unfinished phrases and unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I learned to ride it when I was about six. It was difficult at first because I kept losing my balance, but I gradually improved with practice. I really enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood.

提案: State your opinion confidently instead of saying “I can guess.” Use the plural form “bikes” or “bicycles” and complete your main idea. Explain why bikes are popular and support your answer with a specific example. Avoid repetition such as “main. Main source of” and use a natural expression like “a common means of transport.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and university students. They are affordable, environmentally friendly, and convenient for short journeys. In my hometown, many people ride bicycles to school, work, or nearby shops.

× Yes, I have a bag when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bag when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a completed period in the past, so the past-tense form had is needed instead of the present-tense form have.

× I learned it so far.

✓ I have learned how to ride it so far.

The phrase so far refers to an action that began in the past and continues up to the present. The present perfect form have learned is therefore more appropriate. Also, how to ride it clearly expresses what was learned.

× At first, it’s kind of difficult.

✓ At first, it was kind of difficult.

The answer describes learning to ride a bike in the past, so the past-tense form was should be used instead of the present-tense form is.

× When you really want to learn something new or a habit or something, skills, then later on...

✓ When you really want to learn a new skill or develop a new habit, it can be difficult at first.

The original sentence contains an unclear and incomplete list of ideas. A parallel structure should be used: learn a new skill and develop a new habit. The revised sentence also has a complete grammatical structure.

× Despite of all the struggles...

✓ Despite all the struggles...

Despite is followed directly by a noun or noun phrase and does not take of. Alternatively, you can say in spite of all the struggles.

× And yeah, at first it’s kind of difficult, but then later on when you really want to learn something new or a habit or something, skills, then later on, despite of all the struggles and yeah, you still.

✓ At first, it was kind of difficult, but despite all the struggles, I kept trying and eventually learned to ride it.

The original sentence ends with you still, which does not contain a complete predicate and therefore does not express a complete idea. Add a main verb, such as kept trying, to complete the sentence.

× I can guess it is popular in our country since when I was a child up until now.

✓ I guess it has been popular in our country since I was a child.

The popularity began in the past and continues until now, so the present perfect form has been is appropriate. Since should introduce the starting point, since I was a child. The phrase up until now is unnecessary here.

× Bicycle is one of the main. Main source of.

✓ Bicycles are one of the main sources of transportation.

When speaking about bicycles in general, use the plural noun bicycles and the plural verb are. After one of the, the following countable noun must also be plural: one of the main sources.

× Bicycle is one of the main. Main source of.

✓ Bicycles are one of the main sources of transportation.

The singular countable noun bicycle normally needs an article, but the general meaning is more naturally expressed with the plural form bicycles. The corrected sentence also combines the two incomplete fragments into one complete sentence.