Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly using the past tense: say “Yes, I did,” rather than “I do have.” Avoid repeated fillers such as “umm” and “I,” and finish your final idea instead of leaving it incomplete. Use a clear structure: direct answer, routine, and one specific detail about riding with your parents. You can also use a linking word such as “Besides” or “In addition.”

例: Yes, I did. I rode my bike to school every day when I was a child. Besides, I often cycled with my parents after dinner, especially at weekends. It was a simple but enjoyable way to spend time together.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a specific example. Correct the relative clause “where is in the northern part of China” to “which is in the northern part of China” or simply omit it. Use “take part in a bike race” instead of “enter a bike race,” and connect your ideas more naturally with “For example” or “In particular.” Avoid repeating “Yes” at the end.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in China, especially in cities such as Qingdao, where I grew up. For example, many people cycle for transportation, exercise, and leisure. Some even take part in bike races along the coast, so cycling is a common part of daily life there.

× I yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike.

The question asks about a past situation, and the phrase 'when I was a child' also refers to the past. Therefore, use the past-tense auxiliary 'did' instead of the present-tense auxiliary 'do'.

× I yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike.

The original sentence has an incorrect word order and begins with 'I yes'. In an affirmative answer, place 'Yes' at the beginning, followed by a complete sentence: 'Yes, I did have a bike.'

× It was a.

✓ It was a lot of fun.

The sentence is incomplete because the article 'a' must be followed by a noun or a noun phrase. Complete the sentence by adding a suitable complement, such as 'a lot of fun.'

× Well, bikes are definitely popular in China since I grew up in Qingdao where is in the northern part of China, people would ride bikes every day and even enter a bike race along the sea.

✓ Well, bikes are definitely popular in China. I grew up in Qingdao, which is in the northern part of China. People would ride bikes every day and even enter bike races along the coast.

Use the relative pronoun 'which' to refer to the place name 'Qingdao' when it is the subject of the clause. The word 'where' refers to a location but cannot function as the subject in 'where is'. Separating the long sentence also makes the meaning clearer.