Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答的核心意思是清楚的，但有很多不自然和重复的表达，例如“broke up”“it broke from my parents”和“in my 7 years old”。应直接说明“有”，然后补充自行车是父母在你七岁时送的礼物。注意使用正确搭配： “receive a bike from my parents”或“my parents gave me a bike”，并用完整、简洁的句子表达。

例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a bike as a birthday present when I was seven. I was very excited because I could ride it around my neighborhood.

提案: 回答了问题，但语法错误和重复较多，例如“both of people have gains a bike”和“they are they can ride”。应先明确表明自行车很受欢迎，再给出具体原因或使用场景，如通勤、锻炼和休闲。可以使用“Many people own bicycles”“for commuting and exercise”等自然表达，并用“because”连接原因。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people own one because cycling is an affordable way to commute and stay fit. In cities, some people also ride bikes for exercise at weekends.

× Yes I broke up.

✓ Yes, I did.

原句的句子结构和回答方式不正确。问题是“Did you have...?”，应使用助动词“did”进行简短回答。“broke up”表示“分手”或“解散”，不符合语境。

× I had a bike when I was a child and it broke from my parents as a parent in as a present in in my 7 years old.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, and my parents gave it to me as a present when I was seven years old.

谈论童年时发生的事情，应使用一般过去时。“gave”是“give”的过去式。原句中的“broke from my parents”不能表达“父母送给我”；应使用“gave it to me”。

× in in my 7 years old

✓ when I was seven years old

表示“在我七岁时”应使用“when I was seven years old”，不能说“in my seven years old”。年龄表达中应使用“was + 数字 + years old”。

× as a parent in as a present

✓ as a present

“present”在这里表示“礼物”，前面需要使用不定冠词“a”，构成“as a present”。“as a parent”意思是“作为父母”，不符合句意，应删除。

× it broke from my parents

✓ my parents gave it to me

原句中的代词和句子关系不清楚。“it”指自行车，“me”指学生。表达“父母把自行车送给我”时，应使用“my parents gave it to me”。

× both of people have gains a bike

✓ Most people in my country own a bike.

“both”只能表示“两者都”，不能直接修饰泛指的“people”。表达“大多数人”应使用“most people”。

× both of people have gains a bike

✓ Most people in my country own a bike.

描述当前国家的普遍情况，应使用一般现在时。“have gains”不是正确的动词形式；这里可以使用“own”，表示“拥有”。

× and they are they can ride a bike as a sport in the modern life

✓ and they can ride bikes as a sport in modern life.

原句重复使用了“they”，并把“are”和“can”错误地连接在一起。情态动词“can”后面直接接动词原形“ride”，因此应改为“they can ride...”。

× ride a bike as a sport

✓ ride bikes as a sport

这里是在泛指骑自行车这项运动，不是指某一辆特定的自行车，因此使用复数“bikes”更合适。

× in the modern life

✓ in modern life

“life”在这里是泛指现代生活，通常不使用定冠词“the”。因此应说“in modern life”。