Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly instead of repeating it. Start with a clear yes-or-no statement, then add one or two specific details, such as when you got the bike, how often you used it, or where you rode it. Use the past tense consistently because the question refers to your childhood.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was about eight years old and usually rode it around my neighborhood after school. It was a simple blue bike, but I really enjoyed riding it with my friends.

提案: Give a direct opinion at the beginning, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.” Improve clarity by replacing incorrect phrases like “face bikes” and “school tuition” with natural expressions such as “ride bikes” and “go to school.” Avoid repetition and incomplete phrases, and explain the popularity with two specific reasons, such as affordability, convenience, or the availability of electric bikes. Use linking words such as “because,” “also,” and “for example” to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who commute to work. They are affordable and convenient, particularly in crowded cities. In addition, electric bikes have become increasingly common because they allow people to travel longer distances without getting too tired.

× people who are going for a job or who are going for school tuition

✓ people who are going to work or school

Use go to work and go to school when describing a destination or regular activity. The preposition for is not appropriate in these expressions. Also, school tuition refers to education fees, not the place students attend.

× we have a like electrical bikes

✓ we have electric bikes

The plural noun bikes cannot be used with the singular article a. Remove a when referring to bikes in general. Electric is the more natural adjective for bikes powered by electricity.

× government government owned by owned by government

✓ government-owned bikes

The original phrase repeats words and uses an incorrect passive structure. Government-owned is a correct compound adjective meaning owned by the government. Use a hyphen when this adjective comes before the noun.

× Bikes are important in my country as people who are going for a job or who are going for school tuition, so they face bikes and we have a like electrical bikes and we have like a government government owned by owned by government.

✓ Bikes are important in my country because people use them to go to work or school. We have electric bikes and government-owned bikes.

The original sentence is difficult to follow because it contains repeated words, an incomplete idea, and several clauses joined without a clear structure. Divide the answer into two complete sentences, use because to give the reason, and use them to refer to bikes. The verb use is also appropriate for describing how people travel by bike.