Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense: use “I didn’t have a bike” instead of “I have no bike.” Say “when I was a child” and avoid the unfinished phrase “because I am a little girl,” which is unclear and uses the wrong tense. Add a specific reason or example, such as your parents’ concerns or the activities you preferred. Avoid fillers and do not repeat “because.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought it was a little dangerous because the roads near our home were busy. Instead, I usually played badminton with my friends.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.” Use the plural pronoun “they” to refer to bikes, and replace “every people” with “everyone” or “people.” Develop the answer with a specific benefit, such as affordability, convenience, or reducing traffic, and connect your ideas with a linking word such as “also” or “as a result.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They are affordable and easy to buy, so many people use them for short journeys. In addition, cycling is convenient because it helps people avoid traffic and stay healthy.

× No, I have no bike when I was child because, uh, because I am a little girl, so.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was a little girl.

Because the question asks about the student's childhood, the answer should use the past tense. Use didn't have instead of have and was instead of am. The final so is unnecessary because the sentence already expresses a complete reason.

× No, I have no bike when I was child because, uh, because I am a little girl, so.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was a little girl.

Use the indefinite article a before child because child is a singular countable noun referring to one child. The correct phrase is a child, not child.

× Yes in my country bikes are very popular because it is very easy to buy and it is very convenient for every people

✓ Yes, in my country, bikes are very popular because they are easy to buy and convenient for everyone.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use they and are instead. They correctly refer back to bikes.

× Yes in my country bikes are very popular because it is very easy to buy and it is very convenient for every people

✓ Yes, in my country, bikes are very popular because they are easy to buy and convenient for everyone.

Every must be followed by a singular countable noun, as in every person. In this sentence, everyone is the natural pronoun because it means all people.