Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cavab suala birbaşa cavab verir və şəxsi detal təqdim edir, lakin bəzi qrammatik və ifadə səhvləri var. “It was my first time” və “it was difficult to ride it” demək daha düzgündür. “When they teach me” əvəzinə keçmiş zamanla “when they taught me”, “I get good at it” əvəzinə isə “I became good at riding it” işlədilməlidir. “For the first time” və “as I said earlier” kimi təkrarlanan ifadələri azaltmaq və fikirləri “at first” və “but after a few months” kimi əlaqələndiricilərlə daha səlis birləşdirmək lazımdır.

例: Yes, I did. When I was six, my aunts bought me my first bike, but at first I found it difficult to ride. After they taught me how to use it, I became quite good at cycling within a few months.

提案: Cavabın əsas fikri aydındır: Azərbaycanda avtomobillər velosipedlərdən daha populyardır. Lakin “Actually not” əvəzinə “Not really” və ya “No, not particularly” demək lazımdır. “In European countries patch clearly” ifadəsi anlaşılmazdır; bunu “In many European countries, cycling is much more common” kimi ifadə edin. “Go to the works” əvəzinə “go to work”, “bikes” və “cars” sözlərindən əvvəl uyğun artikl və müqayisə quruluşlarından istifadə edin. Cavabı daha effektiv etmək üçün ölkənizdə insanların avtomobillərə üstünlük verməsinin səbəbini, məsələn, məsafələrin uzun və velosiped yollarının az olmasını, konkret şəkildə qeyd edin.

例: No, not particularly. Cars are much more popular than bikes in Azerbaijan because many people prefer driving, especially for long journeys. In addition, there are not enough dedicated cycle lanes, so cycling is less convenient than it is in many European countries.

× but after a few months when they teach me, I get good at it.

✓ but after a few months, when they taught me, I got good at it.

Because the student is describing events that happened in the past, both verbs should be in the past tense: taught and got. Grammar problem type ID: 5.

× it was first time

✓ it was the first time

The ordinal expression first time normally requires the definite article the when referring to a specific experience. Grammar problem type ID: 22.

× Yes, actually when I was six years old my aunts bought a bike for me for the first time and as I said earlier it was first time so it was difficult to cycle it on the street, but after a few months when they teach me, I get good at it.

✓ Yes. Actually, when I was six years old, my aunts bought me a bike. As I said earlier, it was the first time I had ridden a bike, so it was difficult to ride it on the street. However, after a few months, when they taught me, I got good at it.

The original answer contains several clauses joined together without clear sentence boundaries. Separating the ideas into shorter sentences makes the answer clearer and avoids a run-on sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 26.

× the car is more popular than bikes in our country

✓ Cars are more popular than bikes in our country.

When speaking about cars and bikes in general, use plural nouns: cars and bikes. The plural subject cars also requires the plural verb are. Grammar problem type ID: 1.

× bike is very common

✓ bikes are very common

The general meaning requires the plural subject bikes, so the verb must also be plural: are. Grammar problem type ID: 27.

× when people use it when they go to the works or university

✓ when people use them when they go to work or university

The expression go to work does not normally take the article the. The noun work is uncountable in this expression. Grammar problem type ID: 17.

× people use it when they go to the works or university

✓ people use them when they go to work or university

The pronoun must agree with the plural noun bikes. Therefore, use the plural pronoun them instead of it. Grammar problem type ID: 12.

× Actually not the car is more popular than bikes in our country because in European countries patch clearly bike is very common when people use it when they go to the works or university. But in our country in Azerbaijan, people love to drive their cars.

✓ Actually, no. Cars are more popular than bikes in our country. In European countries, bikes are very common, and people use them when they go to work or university. However, in Azerbaijan, people love to drive their cars.

The original response has an incorrect word order, repeated when-clauses, and several ideas joined unclearly. Use a clear subject-verb structure and separate contrasting ideas into complete sentences. Grammar problem type ID: 26.