Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating the same idea at the beginning and end. Correct the grammar in “when I was child” to “when I was a child,” and use “pedals” instead of “paddles.” The phrase “the sported thing” is unclear, so describe the feature more precisely, such as “training wheels,” which helped you balance. Also, avoid fillers and repetition such as “so, so” and “get get.” Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific details.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue bicycle with training wheels, which helped me learn how to balance. I often rode it around my neighborhood after school, so I have very fond memories of it.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then explain why bikes are popular. Improve accuracy by saying “in these kinds of areas,” “bikes are one of the most common means of transport,” and “in the countryside and rural areas.” Avoid repeated phrases such as “especially” and “bikes are pretty much popular,” as well as fillers like “you know” and “maybe.” Add a specific comparison or example to make the response more developed and coherent.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in India, especially in rural areas and small towns. Many streets are narrow, and traffic can be heavy, so motorcycles are a convenient and affordable way to travel. People often use them to go to school, college, work, or nearby markets.

× I used to have a bike when I was child.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child.

The singular countable noun child requires an article. Use a before child when referring to one child in a general statement.

× So, so it always get get the balance kind of thing.

✓ So, so it always got the balance kind of thing.

The student is describing a childhood experience in the past, so the past-tense form got is needed instead of get. Avoid repeating the verb get.

× So in these kind of, you know, countryside and the rural areas, bike is most common way of transporting, maybe going to college, maybe going to school or even office.

✓ So, in these kinds of, you know, countryside and rural areas, a bike is the most common way of transporting, maybe going to college, going to school, or even going to the office.

The demonstrative these must be followed by the plural noun kinds, so use these kinds of. Also, a bike and the most common way need articles because they are singular countable nouns. Use the office when referring to the workplace in general.

× So in these kind of, you know, countryside and the rural areas, bike is most common way of transporting, maybe going to college, maybe going to school or even office.

✓ So in these kinds of, you know, countryside and the rural areas, a bike is the most common way of transporting, maybe going to college, maybe going to school or even the office.

The singular countable noun bike needs the article a. The superlative phrase most common normally requires the definite article the. The noun office also needs an article in this context, so use the office.