Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ начинается прямо, но содержит заметные грамматические ошибки и незавершённую фразу. Исправьте “when I were” на “when I was”, а “we live” на “we lived”, поскольку речь идёт о прошлом. Выражение “play outside and too much” построено неправильно; лучше сказать “they didn’t allow me to play outside very often”. Завершите мысль естественно: “so I didn’t have many opportunities to ride a bike”. Сократите заполнители (“uh”, “umm”) и используйте простую связку “because” для ясного объяснения причины.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. We lived in an apartment, and my parents were quite strict, so they didn’t allow me to play outside very often. As a result, I didn’t have many opportunities to ride a bike.

提案: Основная идея понятна, но ответ содержит повторение “in my country”, много пауз и несколько неподходящих слов. “Transparent” неверно в данном контексте; используйте “environmentally friendly” или “sustainable”. Вместо неестественного “the culture of riding bikes and riding transport” скажите “cycling culture and cycling infrastructure”. Ответ заканчивается незавершённой фразой “in the near future”; добавьте конкретное продолжение, например “more people will start cycling”. Свяжите мнение и прогноз с помощью “although” или “however” и приведите одну конкретную причину, например отсутствие безопасных велосипедных дорожек.

例: No, I wouldn’t say that bikes are very popular in my country. Cycling infrastructure is still limited, and many cities do not have enough safe bike lanes. However, I hope more people will start cycling in the near future because it is an environmentally friendly and affordable way to travel.

× when I were a child

✓ when I was a child

The question refers to a period in the past, so the verb must be in the past tense. The correct past form of be with I is was, not were.

× we live in an apartment

✓ we lived in an apartment

The speaker is describing the situation during childhood, so live must be changed to its past-tense form, lived.

× they did not allow me to play outside and too much

✓ they did not allow me to play outside very much

Very much is the appropriate adverbial expression for describing the limited frequency of an activity. Too much does not fit naturally in this sentence.

× I was restricted to

✓ I was restricted to staying indoors

When to is a preposition, the verb that follows it should be in the -ing form. The expression restricted to staying indoors is also complete, whereas restricted to alone leaves the sentence unfinished.

× the culture of riding bikes and riding transport

✓ the culture of riding bikes and using transportation

After the conjunction and, the two activities should have parallel grammatical forms. Using transportation is the natural expression, and using is parallel with riding.

× environmentally friendly, transparent

✓ environmentally friendly

Transparent does not describe a type of transportation in this context. Environmentally friendly is the appropriate adjective phrase for transportation that causes less environmental harm.

× However, I hope that in the near future.

✓ However, I hope that this will change in the near future.

The original sentence is incomplete because the clause after that does not contain a subject and a verb. Adding this will change creates a complete and grammatically correct sentence.