Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız soruya doğrudan “Yes” diyerek başlıyor ve bisikletin görünüşüyle ilgili ayrıntılar veriyorsunuz. Ancak “when I was a child's” yerine “when I was a child”, “two wheeled” yerine “two-wheeled”, “friends who jealous” yerine “friends who were jealous” kullanılmalı. “Go somewhere and for some trips” ifadesi doğal değil; bunun yerine “get around” veya “go on short trips” diyebilirsiniz. Ayrıca “uh” tekrarlarını azaltın ve ayrıntıları daha düzenli bağlamak için “It was also...” veya “Because of this...” gibi bağlayıcılar kullanın. Cevabı 3–4 net cümleyle tamamlamanız daha etkili olur.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a nice, two-wheeled bike with lots of colorful stickers on it. I often used it to get around my neighborhood and go on short trips with my friends. Some of them were even jealous because my bike looked so cool.

提案: Cevabınız soruya doğrudan cevap veriyor ve çocuklar ile yaşlılar arasında anlamlı bir karşılaştırma yapıyor. Ancak “tend to to use” ifadesindeki tekrar düzeltilmeli; doğru kullanım “tend to use” şeklindedir. “The older people” yerine genel bir gruptan söz ederken “older people” demek daha doğaldır. “Much much faster” yerine “much faster” veya “considerably faster” kullanın. Ayrıca bisikletlerin neden çocuklar ve gençler arasında popüler olduğunu açıklamak için “because they are affordable and convenient” gibi daha spesifik bir neden ekleyebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Turkey, especially among children and teenagers. They often use them for fun, exercise, or getting around their neighborhoods. However, older people tend to use motorbikes or cars because these forms of transport are considerably faster and more convenient for longer journeys.

× when I was a child's

✓ when I was a child

The noun child is used after the expression when I was, so it should be singular and not possessive. Child's means belonging to a child, which is not the intended meaning.

× there are lots of friends

✓ there were lots of friends

The student is describing a situation in the past, so the past form of there be is required. Use there were with the plural noun friends.

× there are lots of friends

✓ there were lots of friends

The question refers to the student's childhood, which is a past period. Therefore, are must be changed to were.

× friends who jealous about my bike

✓ friends who were jealous of my bike

The relative clause who jealous does not contain a verb. Add were to form a complete clause. Also, the correct preposition after jealous is of.

× jealous about my bike

✓ jealous of my bike

The adjective jealous is normally followed by the preposition of when describing envy or feelings toward someone's possession.