Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Soruyu doğrudan yanıtlamanız iyi, ancak “ride with it, to ride it” ifadesi doğal değil ve gereksiz tekrara yol açıyor. “I enjoyed riding it” veya “I used to ride it” gibi daha doğal kalıplar kullanın. Cevabı bir neden ya da kısa bir anıyla destekleyerek daha etkili hâle getirebilirsiniz; örneğin bisikleti nerede kullandığınızı belirtin.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I really enjoyed riding it. I used to cycle around my neighbourhood with my friends, especially at weekends.

提案: Yanıtınız soruya tam olarak doğrudan cevap vermiyor; “Yes, bikes are quite popular...” gibi net bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın. “Every family need to need to know” yerine “most children learned how to ride a bike” kullanın; özne-fiil uyumuna ve zaman kullanımına dikkat edin. “It was really good for children to explain” ifadesi anlaşılmıyor; bunun yerine bisikletlerin çocuklar için neden yararlı olduğunu açıkça belirtin. Ayrıca uzun ve bağlantısız cümleler yerine “because”, “for example” ve “nowadays” gibi bağlaçlarla en fazla 3–4 düzenli cümle kurun.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. Most parents teach their children how to ride because cycling is a fun and healthy activity. For example, many children ride their bikes in parks or around their neighbourhoods at weekends.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was really good to ride with it, to ride it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and it was really good to ride it.

The preposition with is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. The verb ride takes the bicycle as a direct object, so say ride it, not ride with it. Avoid repeating the same idea with to ride it.

× Of course when I was a child, every family need to need to know how to ride a bike and it was like a very important job for fathers and mothers as well and of course it was really good for children to explain

✓ Of course, when I was a child, every family needed to know how to ride a bike. It was a very important skill for parents, and it was really good for children to learn.

Because the sentence refers to a situation in the past, need should be changed to the past form needed. The repeated phrase need to need is incorrect; use needed to know. The word learn is appropriate when talking about children acquiring a skill.

× Of course when I was a child, every family need to need to know how to ride a bike and it was like a very important job for fathers and mothers as well and of course it was really good for children to explain

✓ Of course, when I was a child, every family needed to know how to ride a bike. It was a very important skill for parents, and it was really good for children to learn.

The original sentence contains several ideas joined by and, which makes it a run-on sentence. Divide it into shorter, complete sentences and use clear punctuation. Also, a skill is more suitable than a job when describing the ability to ride a bike.