Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use the correct past tense: “when I was a child.” Also, connect the two ideas clearly with “but” and add a brief reason or detail to make the answer more complete. Avoid the unclear word “shy,” which seems to be an incorrect word choice here.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child, but my sister did. My parents thought it was unsafe for me to ride on the busy roads in our neighborhood.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in India.” Avoid the unclear phrase “As I said living in India” and specify whether you mean bicycles or motorbikes. Use accurate subject-verb agreement—for example, “many people use bikes regularly”—and organize your reasons with linking words such as “because” and “especially.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in India, especially motorbikes. Many people use them regularly because they are affordable and convenient in busy cities. In my neighborhood, almost every family owns one, so they are a common form of transportation.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I'm shy but my sister did.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my sister did.

The question asks about the past, so the verb after when must also be in the past tense. Use was, not am. Also, child correctly expresses the intended meaning; shy describes personality and does not fit the context.

× As I said living in India, it's a very hot country they use the bike regularly but in my opinion my neighbourhood and everyone around me have a bike and it's pretty popular.

✓ As I said, I live in India, which is a very hot country, so people use bikes regularly. In my opinion, bikes are pretty popular in my neighbourhood, and everyone around me has one.

The original answer contains several clauses joined together without appropriate punctuation or conjunctions, creating a run-on sentence. Divide the ideas into two sentences and use which and so to connect the information clearly.

× As I said living in India, it's a very hot country they use the bike regularly but in my opinion my neighbourhood and everyone around me have a bike and it's pretty popular.

✓ As I said, I live in India, which is a very hot country, so people use bikes regularly. In my opinion, bikes are pretty popular in my neighbourhood, and everyone around me has one.

When talking about bicycles in general, use the plural form bikes rather than the singular form the bike. The plural form is more natural when referring to a common activity or a type of vehicle in general.

× As I said living in India, it's a very hot country they use the bike regularly but in my opinion my neighbourhood and everyone around me have a bike and it's pretty popular.

✓ As I said, I live in India, which is a very hot country, so people use bikes regularly. In my opinion, bikes are pretty popular in my neighbourhood, and everyone around me has one.

The pronoun everyone is grammatically singular, so it must be followed by has, not have. Use everyone around me has one when referring to each person individually.