Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer does not directly respond to the question about having a bike, so the content is irrelevant. Start with a clear answer such as “Yes, I did” or “No, I didn’t,” and then add one or two specific details about the bike, how often you rode it, or where you used it. Avoid introducing yourself because the examiner already knows this information. Use accurate sentence structure and linking words such as “because,” “also,” or “when.”

例: Yes, I did. I had a blue bike when I was about eight years old, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends. I really enjoyed cycling because it was fun and gave me a sense of freedom.

提案: Your answer mainly discusses your childhood and your son rather than explaining whether bikes are popular in your country. Begin with a direct opinion, such as “Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country,” and support it with specific reasons or examples. Use the correct past tense in “I had a bike” and the present perfect or present tense when discussing current preferences. Connect your ideas with words such as “because,” “especially,” and “for example.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. Many people ride them in parks or use them for exercise because traffic can be heavy in cities. For example, I often see families cycling together at the weekend.

× Hi I am Oran Topau. I am a computer engineer I have been living in Istanbul for thirty thirty five years.

✓ Hi, I am Oran Topau. I am a computer engineer, and I have been living in Istanbul for thirty-five years.

The second sentence contains two independent clauses joined without proper punctuation or a conjunction. Add a comma and the conjunction and to connect them correctly. Also, write the number as thirty-five, not thirty thirty five.

× Okay, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Okay, I had a bike when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a completed period in the past, so use the simple past form had instead of the present-tense form have. Use had for possession in a finished past time.