Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Répondez directement et utilisez une structure grammaticale correcte. « Charged » est probablement une erreur de prononciation ou de choix de mot pour « a child ». De plus, utilisez le passé simple « grew up » après « when I », et évitez de répéter « when ». Vous pouvez ajouter une courte raison pour rendre la réponse plus naturelle et plus développée.

例: No, honestly, I never had a bike when I was a child. My parents thought it was safer for me to play indoors, so I never learned how to ride one.

提案: Commencez par répondre clairement au présent : « Yes, they are quite popular ». Corrigez la grammaire et le choix des mots : dites « A few years ago, the government introduced a bike-sharing scheme » plutôt que « from government they lent a bike ». Utilisez des mots de liaison comme « however » et « as a result » pour organiser les idées, et précisez l’effet de cette initiative dans votre ville.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities. They were not very common in the past; however, a few years ago, the government introduced a bike-sharing scheme. As a result, more people started using bikes for short journeys and commuting.

× No, honestly I never had a bike when I was charged or when I even when I grow up.

✓ No, honestly, I never had a bike when I was a child or even when I grew up.

The verb grow refers to a completed period in the past, so it should be changed to its past-tense form, grew. The phrase charged has also been corrected to a child to express the intended meaning.

× No, honestly I never had a bike when I was charged or when I even when I grow up.

✓ No, honestly, I never had a bike when I was a child or even when I grew up.

The original sentence repeats when and even when, which makes the structure unclear. Use one when-clause followed by or even when to connect the two time periods correctly.

× It wasn't that popular before, but few years ago from government they lent a bike. In my city especially so after that it became quite popular.

✓ It wasn't that popular before, but a few years ago the government lent out bikes, especially in my city, so it became quite popular.

Few years ago is incorrect when referring to a small number of years. Use a few years ago because a few means some years. Also, bikes is more suitable than a bike when discussing bicycles generally.

× It wasn't that popular before, but few years ago from government they lent a bike. In my city especially so after that it became quite popular.

✓ It wasn't that popular before, but a few years ago the government lent out bikes, especially in my city, so it became quite popular.

The answer discusses bicycles as a general public service, so the plural noun bikes is more appropriate than the singular expression a bike.

× It wasn't that popular before, but few years ago from government they lent a bike. In my city especially so after that it became quite popular.

✓ It wasn't that popular before, but a few years ago the government lent out bikes, especially in my city, so it became quite popular.

Government refers to a specific institution in the country, so it should be preceded by the definite article: the government.

× It wasn't that popular before, but few years ago from government they lent a bike. In my city especially so after that it became quite popular.

✓ It wasn't that popular before, but a few years ago the government lent out bikes, especially in my city, so it became quite popular.

In my city especially so is not a complete sentence because it does not have a clear verb or logical connection. Combine this idea with the previous sentence and use so to show the result.