Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and use complete, accurate sentences. Say “when I was a child” or “when I was a kid,” not “when I was kid.” Avoid the self-correction “there's there were” and use the past tense consistently because you are describing your childhood. Also, say “I really enjoyed riding it” rather than “I enjoyed the riding.” Add one specific detail about how you used the bike to make the answer more vivid.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was black and had some cartoon characters painted on it. I really enjoyed riding it, especially with my sister, because we often explored the neighborhood together after school.

提案: Give a clear answer first, then support it with one or two organized reasons. The response is incomplete and contains several confusing repetitions, so avoid stopping mid-sentence or correcting yourself repeatedly. Use “especially among students,” not “especially to students,” and explain whether you mean bicycles are popular with both boys and girls. Include a specific example, such as students cycling to school or people riding bikes for exercise.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students. Many teenagers ride them to school because bicycles are affordable and convenient. They are also popular with both boys and girls, and some people use them for exercise at weekends.

× I had a bike when I was kid, it was black and there's there were some cartoon characters on it.

✓ I had a bike when I was a kid. It was black, and there were some cartoon characters on it.

The singular countable noun kid needs the indefinite article a. Also, there were is the correct past-tense form of there be because the sentence describes the bike in the past.

× I had a bike when I was kid, it was black and there's there were some cartoon characters on it.

✓ I had a bike when I was a kid. It was black, and there were some cartoon characters on it.

There was is used with a singular noun, and there were is used with a plural noun. Because cartoon characters is plural, the correct form is there were. The unnecessary form there's should be removed.

× I had a bike when I was kid, it was black and there's there were some cartoon characters on it.

✓ I had a bike when I was a kid. It was black, and there were some cartoon characters on it.

The original contains a comma splice because two complete sentences are joined only by a comma. Separate them with a full stop or join them with an appropriate conjunction.

× I really enjoyed the riding and I used to spend time with my sister.

✓ I really enjoyed riding it, and I used to spend time with my sister.

Enjoy is followed by a gerund, or verb ending in -ing, without the article the. Use enjoyed riding, and use the pronoun it to refer to the bike.

× Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially to students not girls boy boy.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially among students, both girls and boys.

Among is the appropriate preposition when referring to a group of people. The phrase especially to students is not suitable here.

× Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially to students not girls boy boy.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially among students, both girls and boys.

When referring to more than one female and more than one male student, use the plural forms girls and boys. The corrected phrase also clearly expresses that both groups are included.

× Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially to students not girls boy boy. student today I watched it plenty times when they

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially among students, both girls and boys. I see students riding bikes very often.

The original response contains speech fragments and an incomplete final clause. A complete sentence needs a clear subject, verb, and complete meaning. The correction gives a complete response that directly answers the question.

× student today I watched it plenty times when they

✓ I see students riding bikes very often.

The question asks about bikes being popular nowadays, so the present tense is appropriate. Use see instead of watched to describe a current and repeated observation.

× student today I watched it plenty times when they

✓ I see students riding bikes very often.

After see, riding can describe the action that the students are performing. The phrase students riding bikes is grammatically complete and clearly expresses the observed activity.