Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính phù hợp và có đưa ra lý do, nhưng còn nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, lặp từ và ngập ngừng khiến câu trả lời thiếu tự nhiên. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời trực tiếp như “Yes, I did.” Sau đó, dùng thì quá khứ đơn nhất quán: “I had”, “my father bought”, “he wanted”. Tránh lặp “every other child” và sửa cách diễn đạt “rely on their my parents car” thành “rely on my parents’ car or motorbike”. Bạn cũng nên kết thúc câu trả lời rõ ràng thay vì bỏ dở ở “and uh”.

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike when I was a child because he wanted me to become more independent. It meant that I didn’t have to rely on my parents to take me everywhere. I also enjoyed riding around my neighborhood and exploring new places.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm và đưa ra lý do hợp lý, nhưng cần cải thiện độ chính xác và sự mạch lạc. Hãy dùng “Yes, they are” thay vì “Yup, it is” vì “bikes” là danh từ số nhiều. Sửa “secondary students and primary students” thành “primary and secondary school students”, đồng thời dùng “ride motorbikes” thay vì “write a motorbike”. Câu “the government don’t let them” nên là “the government doesn’t allow them to ride motorbikes because they are too young”. Hãy tránh lặp “the only solution/choice” và dùng từ nối như “because” hoặc “therefore” để liên kết ý tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among primary and secondary school students. The government does not allow children under a certain age to ride motorbikes, so bicycles are their main means of transportation. Many students use them to travel to school because they are convenient and affordable.

× like every other children

✓ like every other child

Every is followed by a singular countable noun, so children must be changed to the singular form child.

× I have a bike when I was a child

✓ I had a bike when I was a child

The phrase when I was a child refers to a completed period in the past, so the past-tense form had is required instead of the present-tense form have.

× my father buy it for me

✓ My father bought it for me

The action happened in the past, so the irregular past-tense form bought must be used instead of buy.

× because he want me to ride on my own

✓ because he wanted me to ride on my own

The reason also belongs to the past situation, so want should be changed to the past-tense form wanted.

× rely on their my parents car or my parents motorbike

✓ rely on my parents' car or my parents' motorbike

The possessive pronouns their and my are incorrectly combined. Because the speaker is referring to their own parents, my is appropriate. The apostrophe in parents' shows possession.

× especially in secondary students and primary students

✓ especially among secondary and primary students

Among is the appropriate preposition when referring to a group of people. In is not suitable in this expression.

× the government don't let them

✓ the government doesn't let them

Government is a singular third-person subject, so it takes does not or doesn't, not do not or don't.

× Yup, it is, especially in secondary students and primary students

✓ Yes, they are, especially among secondary and primary students

The subject bikes is plural, so it must be replaced with the plural pronoun they, and the verb is must agree with it as are.

× in this age

✓ at this age

The standard preposition used with a person's current age or a particular age period is at, as in at this age.

× So they have the only solution they have, the only choice they have is their bike.

✓ So their only choice is to ride a bike.

The original sentence repeats the same idea and does not connect the clauses correctly. Using their only choice is to ride a bike creates a complete and natural sentence structure.