Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer in the past tense because the question asks about your childhood: use “No, I didn’t.” Avoid repetition such as “a bike” and “an accident with a bike,” and connect your ideas more clearly with linking words such as “because” and “as a result.” Also, say “I was never taught to ride” instead of “nobody ever taught me,” and finish with a complete, natural sentence.

例: No, I didn’t. When I was young, I was knocked over by a cyclist, so I became quite afraid of bikes. In addition, I was never taught how to ride one, so I didn’t have a bike as a child.

提案: Give a clear answer first, then support it with specific reasons. Use “one of the most popular forms of transport” rather than “the most popular transportation,” and replace “with the full population” with a natural phrase such as “because China has a large population.” Improve the phrasing “direct and easy commute” to “a convenient way to commute and run errands,” and use linking words to make the explanation more fluent.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in China, especially in large cities. Since the country has a huge population and busy roads, many people use bikes as a convenient and inexpensive way to commute or run errands. They are also more environmentally friendly than cars.

× No, I do not.

✓ No, I did not.

The question uses the past tense, did you have, because it asks about your childhood. Therefore, the answer should also use the past tense: did not, not do not.

× I had a accident with a bike.

✓ I had an accident with a bike.

Accident begins with a vowel sound, so it must be preceded by an, not a.

× Nobody ever taught me so I do not.

✓ Nobody ever taught me to ride a bike, so I did not ride one.

The verb taught needs a clear complement. The original sentence also ends with an incomplete use of do not. Adding to ride a bike and did not ride one makes the sentence structurally complete.

× Because in China with the full population, everybody wants direct and easy commute to run errands.

✓ Because China has a large population, everybody wants a direct and easy commute to run errands.

Full is not the appropriate adjective for describing the size of a population in this context. Use large population instead.

× Everybody wants direct and easy commute to run errands.

✓ Everybody wants a direct and easy commute to run errands.

Commute is a singular countable noun in this sentence, so it needs the indefinite article a.

× Yes, bikes are absolutely popular, the most popular transportation in China, because in China with the full population, everybody wants direct and easy commute to run errands.

✓ Yes, bikes are absolutely popular and are the most popular means of transportation in China because China has a large population and everybody wants a direct and easy commute to run errands.

The original sentence contains loosely connected clauses separated by commas. Use and to connect the two descriptions of bikes, and connect the reason with a complete clause beginning with because.