Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and then add one or two clear details. Avoid hesitant and confusing phrases such as “maybe or is not that big” and “maybe with fourteen inch.” Use the past tense consistently: “I had,” “it was,” and “it had.” Also, say “a fourteen-inch bike” rather than “with fourteen inch.” A more natural answer would mention how you used the bike or how you felt about it, which would make the response more specific and effective.

例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a small blue-and-yellow bike for my birthday when I was about eight. It had fourteen-inch wheels, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school. I was really excited because it was my first bike.

提案: State your opinion confidently instead of beginning with “probably yes,” and avoid rhetorical phrases such as “right?” Use natural expressions such as “not everyone can afford a car,” “a practical alternative,” and “short-distance travel.” Improve grammar by saying “bikes can be a substitute for cars” or “bikes can serve as an alternative to cars.” The answer would be clearer if you used linking words such as “because,” “as a result,” and “especially,” and included a specific example of who uses bikes.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Not everyone can afford a car, so bicycles are a practical and inexpensive alternative, especially for short-distance travel. For example, many students and office workers ride bikes to school or work because they are convenient and help them avoid traffic.

× I think the color was blue and yellow maybe or is not that big, maybe with fourteen inch yeah.

✓ I think the color was maybe blue and yellow, and it was not that big—perhaps fourteen inches.

The answer describes a childhood bike in the past, so is not should be changed to was not. Keep the verb tense consistent when describing past events.

× I think the color was blue and yellow maybe or is not that big, maybe with fourteen inch yeah.

✓ I think the color was maybe blue and yellow, and it was not that big—perhaps fourteen inches.

The noun inches must be plural because the quantity is fourteen. Use a plural noun after numbers greater than one.

× Well, probably yes, because in our country there is a huge population and not everybody could afford to buy a car or something like that, right?

✓ Well, probably yes, because our country has a huge population and not everybody can afford to buy a car or something like that, right?

The question asks about a present situation, so can is more appropriate than could. Use can to describe present ability or possibility.

× So bike could be a substitute for them and it could be convenient for them to ride a bike, especially for the short term distance travel.

✓ So a bike could be a substitute for them, and it could be convenient for them to ride a bike, especially for short-distance travel.

A singular countable noun such as bike normally needs an article when it is mentioned generally. Use a bike when referring to one bike as an example.

× So bike could be a substitute for them and it could be convenient for them to ride a bike, especially for the short term distance travel.

✓ So a bike could be a substitute for them, and it could be convenient for them to ride a bike, especially for short-distance travel.

The phrase refers to travel in general, not to one specific type of travel. Therefore, do not use the before short-distance travel.

× So bike could be a substitute for them and it could be convenient for them to ride a bike, especially for the short term distance travel.

✓ So a bike could be a substitute for them, and it could be convenient for them to ride a bike, especially for short-distance travel.

Short-distance is the natural compound adjective used before travel. Compound adjectives should be written with a hyphen when they modify a noun together.