Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use the past tense consistently: say “didn’t have,” “was afraid,” and “rode.” Use the natural phrase “my brothers’ bike” instead of “the bike of my brothers,” and avoid repeating “when I was a child.” Begin with a direct answer, then give the reason and a specific memory. Also say “I didn’t have my own bike” rather than “I do not have mine.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of riding. Once, I rode my brother’s bike, fell over, and hurt my knee. After that experience, I never wanted to have my own bike.

提案: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating “because.” Use the plural form “bikes” or “bicycles” consistently, and add a specific supporting detail about where or when people ride them. A linking word such as “Additionally” can make the second reason clearer.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers. They enjoy cycling because it gives them a sense of freedom and allows them to spend time outdoors. Additionally, many people ride bikes in parks or around their neighborhoods at weekends.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child because I'm afraid of riding the bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of riding a bike.

The question asks about the past, so the past-tense forms didn't have and was afraid are needed instead of don't have and I'm afraid. Use a bike when referring to a nonspecific bike for the first time.

× I remember I ride the bike of my brothers once when I was a child and I fell down at that time, so I do not have mine.

✓ I remember I rode my brothers' bike once when I was a child, and I fell down at that time, so I didn't have one of my own.

Use the past-tense form rode because the riding happened in the past. Use didn't have instead of do not have because the sentence describes the situation during childhood. My brothers' bike is the natural possessive form, and one of my own is clearer than mine in this context.

× Bikes are popular in our country because children love to ride bicycle because it gives them a sense of freedom and they enjoy doing it.

✓ Bikes are popular in our country because children love to ride bicycles. They give children a sense of freedom, and children enjoy riding them.

Use the plural noun bicycles because the sentence refers to bikes in general. The plural pronoun they agrees with bicycles, and them clearly refers back to bicycles. Avoid repeating because in the same sentence; separating the ideas makes the sentence clearer.