Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question in the past tense because it refers to your childhood. Use “had” rather than “have,” and add one specific detail, such as when you used the bike or what you used it for. A complete two-sentence answer would sound more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood after school, and I really enjoyed spending time outdoors.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating “my country.” Use the plural form “they’re very popular” because “bikes” is plural. Connect your ideas with precise linking words, and avoid ending with the incomplete word “Because.” You could also explain that bikes are useful in crowded areas because they are affordable and easy to park.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in crowded cities like Cairo. Since traffic is often heavy, many children, young adults, and even older people use bicycles because they are affordable and easy to park.

× Yes I have a bike

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about your childhood, so you need to use the past tense. Use had instead of have because the bike belonged to you in the past.

× Yes, it's very popular in my country because my country is very crowded and the population in Cairo is over twenty five million.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because my country is very crowded and the population of Cairo is over twenty-five million.

The noun bikes is plural, so it should be repeated or replaced with the plural subject bikes. The pronoun it is singular and cannot refer correctly to bikes. Also, population of Cairo is the more natural prepositional phrase.

× Because

✓ Many people, including small children, young people, and even older people, are trying to use bikes.

Because is a subordinating conjunction and cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. It must introduce a dependent clause connected to a main clause. Here, the idea can be expressed clearly as a complete sentence.