Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有明确回应，也提供了年龄、获得自行车的方式和父亲帮助等具体细节，内容比较丰富。但语法和表达不够自然：应将“gotta buy it”改为“got it”或“I got a bike”；“won that bike by taking a lottery”应改为“won it in a lottery”；“learned riding on bike”应改为“learned to ride it”。同时避免“how I how I”的重复，并使用更清晰的连接词组织信息。

例: Yes, I did. I got a bike when I was about eight years old, and it was very special because I won it in a lottery. I still remember learning to ride it, and my father helped me a lot.

提案: 你直接表达了观点，并给出了汽车更方便这一原因，但句子中有较多语法错误和重复表达。应将“the since the development of vehicles”改为“with the development of cars”；“people are tend”改为“people tend”；“conveniency”改为更自然的“convenience”。此外，“Bikes are only for athletes”过于绝对，可以改为“Bikes are mainly used by athletes or people who cycle for exercise”，并补充一个具体例子，使观点更准确、更有说服力。

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country these days. With the development of cars, many people prefer driving because it is more convenient, especially for long journeys. Bicycles are mainly used by athletes or people who cycle for exercise.

× Yeah, I gotta buy it.

✓ Yeah, I got one.

问题发生在过去，应该使用过去时。 “gotta buy”表示“必须买”，是现在或将来的意思；这里应改为 “got”，表示“买到了”。同时用 “one” 指代一辆自行车更自然。

× When I was around 8 years old and there was a very special bike for me because I won that bike by taking a lottery and I still remember how I how I learned riding on bike.

✓ When I was around eight years old, there was a very special bike for me because I won it in a lottery, and I still remember how I learned to ride a bike.

表示“在抽奖中赢得”应使用介词 “in”，而不是 “by”。“in a lottery”表示“在抽奖活动中”。此外，“riding on bike”中的介词搭配不正确，应该说 “ride a bike”。

× When I was around 8 years old and there was a very special bike for me because I won that bike by taking a lottery and I still remember how I how I learned riding on bike.

✓ When I was around eight years old, there was a very special bike for me because I won it in a lottery, and I still remember how I learned to ride a bike.

“learn”后面通常接 “to do” 来表示“学会做某事”，所以应说 “learned to ride”，而不是 “learned riding”。建议记住结构：learn to do something。

× When I was around 8 years old and there was a very special bike for me because I won that bike by taking a lottery and I still remember how I how I learned riding on bike.

✓ When I was around eight years old, there was a very special bike for me because I won it in a lottery, and I still remember how I learned to ride a bike.

可数名词单数 “bike” 前面需要冠词或其他限定词。这里泛指“一辆自行车”，所以应使用 “a bike”，不能说 “ride bike”。

× I don't think bikes are so popular in my country right now because the since the development of vehicles, people are tend to choose the cars over bicycles because cars will provide more conveniency.

✓ I don't think bikes are so popular in my country right now because, with the development of vehicles, people tend to choose cars over bicycles because cars provide more conveniency.

“because” 和 “since” 不能这样连续使用。原句中的 “because the since” 连接词重复且结构错误。这里可以使用 “because, with the development of vehicles,” 来表达“因为随着交通工具的发展”。

× I don't think bikes are so popular in my country right now because the since the development of vehicles, people are tend to choose the cars over bicycles because cars will provide more conveniency.

✓ I don't think bikes are so popular in my country right now because, with the development of vehicles, people tend to choose cars over bicycles because cars provide more conveniency.

描述目前普遍存在的情况时，应使用一般现在时。“are tend”是错误结构，应改为 “tend”。一般现在时中，主语 “people” 后直接使用动词原形 “tend”。

× I don't think bikes are so popular in my country right now because the since the development of vehicles, people are tend to choose the cars over bicycles because cars will provide more conveniency.

✓ I don't think bikes are so popular in my country right now because, with the development of vehicles, people tend to choose cars over bicycles because cars provide more conveniency.

这里是在说明汽车通常具有的优点，而不是预测汽车将提供什么。因此应使用一般现在时 “provide”，而不是将来时 “will provide”。

× Bikes only for people like athletes right now.

✓ Bikes are only for people like athletes right now.

原句缺少系动词 “are”。英语句子通常需要完整的主语和谓语；“Bikes”是主语，“are”是系动词，后面接介词短语 “only for people like athletes”。