Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer in two clear sentences and use the past tense consistently. Add a brief reason or detail to make your response more developed. Correct the run-on sentence by using a full stop or a linking word, and change “grow” to “grew.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I bought my first one when I was older because I wanted to exercise and travel around my neighborhood more easily.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence and avoid repeating words such as “quite popular,” “have,” and “exercise.” Use natural expressions like “among younger people” and “to get some exercise.” Explain how people use bikes with accurate verb forms and parallel structure, such as “ride to school and hang out with friends.”

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among younger people. Many students ride to school to get some exercise, while others use bikes to meet up with friends. They are also a convenient and inexpensive way to travel short distances.

× I did not have a bike when I was a child I bought it when I grow older

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child. I bought one when I grew older.

The answer refers to past events, so grow must be changed to the past tense grew. Also, one is used instead of it because the speaker is introducing the bike for the first time in the second sentence.

× I did not have a bike when I was a child I bought it when I grow older

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child. I bought one when I grew older.

Two independent clauses are joined without punctuation. Separate them with a full stop, or join them with a suitable conjunction such as but.

× Yes, riding a bike is quite popular in my country as it actually is quite popular for the young generations to have have two exercise exercise usually riding to schools and hang out with the friends.

✓ Yes, riding a bike is quite popular in my country, especially among young people, because it is a good way to exercise. Young people usually ride to school and hang out with their friends.

The original sentence contains a repeated verb, a repeated noun, and an incomplete and confusing clause. Organize the ideas into two complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs. Use ride to school and hang out with their friends to express the activities naturally.

× Yes, riding a bike is quite popular in my country as it actually is quite popular for the young generations to have have two exercise exercise usually riding to schools and hang out with the friends.

✓ Yes, riding a bike is quite popular in my country, especially among young people, because it is a good way to exercise. Young people usually ride to school and hang out with their friends.

The phrase the friends is incorrect when referring to friends in general. Use their friends because the friends belong to the young people. Also, school is commonly used without an article when referring to the general activity of going to school.